by PineappleKevin
Mom sounds like a goer. Let's have more on this.
ryeandgingerayle2@yahoo.com
Bipolar mom and horndog kid and still nothing happened. Needed some type of action
When I was 18 and still a virgin I never acted like that. Calling it a thing? You made the character out to be mentally challenged and the mother out to be sadistic. Bad start to a good idea. Most of the flow was some what good. Some a little choppy.
complete and utter sack of shit attempt at writing and a waste of 3 minutes
go back to school and at least finish your class in english !!!!!!!
Seeing mom's hairy bush makes a lasting impression. After this encounter and measuring, mom will be able to properly train and control Kevin. It should work out well.
I think you did well enough, please keep writing. You may want to try and get an editor from the pool of editors willing to correct grammar/spelling/etc. I was intrigued enough that I'll stick with the story and see where it goes. I liked the interaction between the mom and son and the plausible way you put them in the dick measuring situation. You have something here, so please continue :-)
Are you serious? I don't mean to belittle anyone on here, but this story was written by someone alot younger than what they pretend to be here. 'My Thing" ... seriously...who says that except a very young boy.
After that, it was just hard to read and take it seriously.
Sorry, again, I don't usually slam anyone..but this one is tooooo far out in left field to be believable or taken seriously.
Hey, I'm the author. Just wanted to add a comment about this.
Sorry about the grammatical mistakes and other errors. The thing is that I initially wrote this not as a story, but as a post on a different forum. The first half of the story (the genitals rubbing against each other) is a real event. I had written it on that forum because I wanted to share it with other users and get some advice on it, so it was written in a very careless, unprofessional manner. I only later decided to use it as the base for an erotic story. So sorry again about the grammar errors.
I hope you enjoy Ch. 02. I wrote that in a professional manner :)
He was just writing it as fasf as he could type it I bet, ppl please just read the stories without grading it for punctuation and grammar gee wiz
I'm curious as to just how old the author is? The story doesn't seem to be written by an adult.