bluerains, I LOVE this. what a beautiful, well expressed vision. But I think that you could lengthen some of the lines, allowing the descriptions to flow more evenly into one another, giving the poem amore serene feel to it by letting the words swim into one another instead of cutting them off so abruptly. just a suggestion, really lovely as is :)
I love this on so many levels.
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