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JimjonkJimjonkalmost 6 years ago
Really?

Firstly, siblings of that age sharing a bed?

Secondly, you really need a proof reader!

Thirdly, not a bad start! Keep going.

Turtle1952Turtle1952almost 6 years ago
Pretty good so far

I think you are doing alright. This could be a hot sexy story. Interested to know why they are sleeping in the same bed though at their age.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Not a story yet

More of a prelude. Waiting for next chapter. Proof read, slow down and keep going.

clearedtofuckclearedtofuckalmost 6 years ago
Sleeping together at ages 27 and 21

Yeah, that's a little hard to believe, but it sure makes plot development much easier. This is gonna get good. I am not a big fan of one page chapters. I gave you a 5 because I can see what is to come.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
O' boy! this is already so good!!

I am eagerly waiting for chapter 2. Good one for a first timer. :) Adios!

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Take a journey with us back in time to the time when we first fell in love with each other despite knowing the consequences of our lust and love.

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