by Ompat10
This has absolutely got to be some of the most infantile writing I have ever seen on this site, and I've been a fan of Literotica for almost 20 years. It's unbearable and unbelievable. Please, for the love of erotic stories, take a writing class or something. This was horrid.
Obviously no proofreading or editing. Bad use of grammar. If you post stories you must do better,
It's pronounced milf, like an abruptly halted pilfer... not em eye ell eff, so preceding it with "an" is not correct.
Stick to reading please do us all a favor and never write another one.
You deserve more encouragement than some of the previous comments gave you. Keep it going ..
a few typos and whatever- who gives a fuck - don't listen to cruel critic jealous of your escapades.....maybe it was his Mom you polished off?
I did not fuck her. It is bullshit. I did not fuck her. I did NAAAAAAAAAAAT!!! Oh hi Mark...
Hai doggy(-style)...
*some shithouse reference to spoons/spooning*
I have no problem with a nice, quick, jerk-off story. Remember though, if you're writing the story while you're jerking off, it's for you not the audience. It sounds like you might have been typing with one hand and jerking with the other - nothing wrong with that but after you cum and your brain clears, take a look back at your story. Remember, for you the story is complete; all the little details are running around in your head, but for the readers, we're mostly in the dark. I'm not saying to write a novel but slow it down a little. Don't mind the trolls.