All Comments on '"Perfect Drop of Sweat"'

by SZonder

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Syndra LynnSyndra Lynnabout 19 years ago
This is

very erotic in a Dr. Seuss kind of way!

odette-odileodette-odileover 18 years ago
singsong

i loved the imagery, but the stiff rhyme and meter lead to reading it in a sort of singsong manner, which i find distracting from being immersed in the scene. still, better than most i have read on this site.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Wonderful

This was a wonderful poem - I loved the simplicity of your language - the image you created of the sweat traveling across your lover's body was, in my mind, stunning, and recalled for me experiences of my own. I also liked the ending when you add the sexual to the sensual

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
WOW!!!!!

That was great you have a talent I really enjoyed it!Thank you.

duddle146duddle146about 17 years ago
pleasant

Pleasantly erotic ~ this rendering seems to invite the reader along to drift on a sea of sexual bliss.

MissDeeMissDeealmost 17 years ago
Nice

i like the way u used something so simply and built a beautiful piece around it. Unlike some pieces i've read your's makes sense and isn't lude, further more u didn't use crude/obscene language to draw the reader in... Loved it!

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