All Comments on 'The Milf Next Door'

Would have been improved with dialogue and more conformity to the English language.

e.g. what does "He went back to holding her by her hips and ass while they both felt like they were out of breath at any moment now" really hope to convey?

you have basics down fairly well, but an editor would help you step up your game.

There is no need for dialog when a story is this erotic. Excellent job.

Her anxiety about his cum filling her could have been eased had she realized there is a very effective “morning after pill” readily available.

When he finished cumming and she wanted more orgasms and pushed him on his back, she could have straddled his face, lowered herself, and told him to clean her up. (With his being a virgin, it is unclear how he became “expert” at eating pussy. But ... oh well!).

I don’t know if he would have enjoyed her creampie, but she would have, and so would I, in reading about it.

Technic. Not bad, good imagination. But could use some editing.

Tell us more of their adventures!