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Hey hey Lady lay in the Indigo blue

the room for lovers like me and you <-I just loved these lines :) Fab!

With these couplets, I would've probably played around with the wording a little more. I think it was the "that" word in both couplets that caused a little problem for me.

there is no light

but that from the street

that dances on your flesh

innocent and sweet

Over-all, this is excellent! Thanks for the read :)

There is a deep rhythm to this poem, I like the couplets and how they draw the reader into a waltz of the moment. I can see the woman here slowly dancing, her dance is just how she moves,natural beauty. The blue floating on her, all of her then just parts of her. Her smile, a breast, a leg, a hand etc. Indigo blue is a very spiritual color and I felt that from this poem.. ty

Du~

your poem was mentioned in the Sunday reviews..