All Comments on 'The Lieutenant'

You did well with this rollicking little story...especially for a first time submission. It was fast and fun. Keep up the good work.

I'm a bit of a Trekkie and I enjoyed this short sharp little story. Keep up the good work!

This old school TOS fan had a blast... Lots of fun!

Your motor-mouth Lieutenant was a great send-up. For a first ever submission, this is good. Thanks for joining the Event, and please keep writing. Cheers!

I like a fast paced story, but wow! That was frantic. In this setting, this context, it worked. And the pacing of the plot felt organic with the rapid-fire dialouge of your heroine. I enjoyed it, but I kind of wish it had lasted a bit longer.

I thought "S'kok" seemed a little tame for someone with Blood Fever. Probably a good thing for Tilley that he was just Romu-lyin'...

Just one criticism:There are quite a few errors of punctuation, nothing major, except when they change the meaning of the sentence. " a tall, burley bearded human with a crooked grin." Without a comma after "burley"(burly is the correct spelling) you are saying his beard is burly.

But I'm a life-long Trekkie, liked this story quite a bit and laughed out loud more than once. Sex with Orion prostitutes usually ends in violence and S'kok(haha!) is such a sly dog! LOL! 5*

"The first orgasm took her breath away, and took the words right out of her mouth."

I see what you did there. ;)

Earth Girls r Easy! Hot, Hard & Fast!

...don't know how kindly anyone with the rights to Star Trek would look on this story, as it's a very blatant ripoff of it. I thought perhaps it was going to use just a few elements and diverge but that wasn't the case. Stopped reading once I read about the Klingon and Harry Mudd.