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by sack02/08/05

One thing I noticed.....

is that not all of your pairs fit the packaging/product scheme. The Eagles were not the packaging for the Patriots product, they are simply rivals. Same as for dog-tail. Yet, you could say nudity is the "package" for beauty and the veil is the "package" for the vow. So, some of the pairs work to support the premise, some don't. This appears to weaken the poem, as does a somewhat wordy 2nd half compared to the very concise earlier stanzas.

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by Trent_Dutch02/08/05

New Poem Reviews

Your poem is mentioned in the New Poems Review Thread for Tuesday 8th of February.

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