All Comments on 'Helping Hand'

I like how you bring this full circle, very clever. It's a bit unsettling that line 5 has no rhyme which interrupts what is otherwise a smooth read. Thank you for sharing.

Thanks for your comment--I could have just added the two lines together but I thought that "to" and "too" rang the rhyme and the off note of the flated ending sets up the surprise of line 6 which one might not expect --- anyway it wasn't without thought but as Alan Ginzberg said, "easier to write rhyming poems then not."

( and jerk me off

I begin to cough

that passes too)

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