by sohurnyy
Please, please, please get an editor. Why must you capitalize random words?
Fab story but u really need an editor. Or use Word - that would help too.
But like the others said you need to do something about your random capitals.
You must be riding the # 7. It is in the middle of yet another of a seemingly endless series of signal upgrades! lol
The random capitalization is Really distracting. I commuted on the NYC subways for 12 years and it's a great fantasy to be fucked on a crowded train, but I think you took it a little too far. Too many orgasms in too short a period to be even slightly believable and too much removal of clothing to think the surrounding passengers might not notice what's going on. I loved it until about her third orgasm, then you lost me.
I didn't like those caps. either - but I loved that morning on the subway. Thank you, sweet lady - and thanks for reminding me of it.
Your Mexican
I read this story a few years ago on a different site. I don't recall the author, but definitely the exact same story.
I also read this story a few years back at ASSTR. If this author is only 22 (as his bio states)...he must have wrote it when he was 16 or so. I'd like to see Mr. sohurnyy prove that he is the original author
I love how SEXY you dress in your NYLONS and
GARTER BELT under your sexy MINI SKIRT. Hope you continue to make all of us HOT.
I loved this story right up until you went ass to mouth. You never go ass to mouth, and I agree that all the clothing coming off and nobody noticed it? I mean, they may have been distracted but, not that distracted. Plus, what kind of freak can have than many orgasms in a row?! I can have multiples but not that many. And please, NO MORE RANDOM CAPITALS!!!!
This story is just a very slight modification of the story "Commuter Tunnels", written by "Administrative Assistant", posted by the AllMe Archives editors to alt.sex.stories.moderated on October 3, 2003. I still have a copy of the message.
Not only is this plagiarism, it's bad plagiarism. Go read the original story, it's written much better and is a better story in every way.
To whoever wrote this - when i was young I stumbled upon this weird story, and I seriously blame you since this was my earliest memories of opening up weirdo sexual thoughts to my innocent mind - Oh how I sometimes wish I could turn back time.
I had a simular experience with a black while I was extreemly fertile. He came in me three times before we got to our station. We later married several months later with me being seven month pregnant with four daughters in me. We now look for construction times on trains and have been lucky in that I am pegnant again with twins.
Would have been a nice adventure tucked away out of sight but on a train adds that extra spice. Kept me hot and wet throughout. Thanks but where is the sequel that tells of what happened next !
When you can write a story that makes a guy feel Excited like I was,nothing more to say,except Thank You
subway molestation is really not something to write an erotica about, its actually a serious problem.
The story should be realistic it could really happen. In reality you cld never fuck on a commuter train crowded or otherwise unless you had a carriage to yourself ( I know I've done it). But you could build up erotic tension, eye contact, flashing fingering...maybe the woman would go to the loo and he'd follow...more likely but it's all in the visuals for the guy so lots of description of the lingerie - the writer didnt even give a colour or texture!
not to good and the use of vulger terminolage dont help to make it better