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Not quite as good as your others...
A few typos, especially in the description. For example:
"Nerdy guy's drug makes people his every mercy."
Very poor english, that. A better phrasing might have been:
"Nerdy guy's drug leaves people at his mercy."
Also, I personally didn't much care for the plot, either. We don't get to know the characters personally, and the storyline seems no differant from a rohypnol induced date rape. Not a very good story at all; your "Truth or Dare" story posted with this one was much better, and "Losing It" was MUCH better.
How about this?
He reworks the drug so it makes the suggestions he gives, or orders, permanent. For example, he makes a suggestion for the woamn on the drug that she will love him totally & completely, and the effect of that suggestion remains even after the drug wears off
Nice
I liked the story. Hope to see more of the story.
Why?
Only 1 chapter with his Drug he could hit on alot of Girls and Women and Impregnate a few and make them forget they were with him.
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