Jason's Hooker

Great Story

You know....Every story does not have to be a stright suck and fuck. This was a beautiful story and well written. Please continue the good work.

Nice.

A great story of a troubled girl's transformation and her new lease on life. It proves that anyone can change their lives and reach their dreams.

sweet

very good, wisht there was more.....

LOVED IT! MY WHAT A WARM FEELING!

Beautifull! A standing ovation! A story that melts the heart! Cinderella/prettygirl with some twists! loved the long lead up to my minds emotional gratification! How could it get any sweeter! Now I am going home to give my wife the longest hug and sweetest kiss! Thanks for putting life into perspective!
Thanks for writing!
Sexmate

i love the story

I loved it was so warm and wonderful
i wish there was more stories like that one
keep writing more stories like that

Beautiful

This is a well written story by an author who has experienced love and knows how to detail it as best as can be put into words. You have a gift!

Once in a great while>>>

Once in a great while an ertic story brings tears. As a well-to-do male I find the tenderess and true sexiness of evolving love in this story to be superb. Bravo!

Compassionate Story

GREAT story of compassion and faith in a human being! Nice to see that experiences (sisters plight)have an impact on a person and the way he reacts to a person in need. Erotic and sensitive; well written :-).

Hope to see more from the Rabbitrunner

Hope For Orhers

There are thousands of girls and young women out there in plights quite similar to Melanie's. I think there are also men out there with the capabilities and sensitivity of Jason. It is my extreme wish that more of the Jasons and the Melanies of the world do cross paths and bring the growth of self worth, self respect, accomplishment and ultimate re-direction that this story so marvelously illustrates. Rabbitrunner, you have a gift. Thanks for the nice piece of work.

Prof. Ramstein

Wonderful

I agree with all the other commenters. A beautiful, heart warming story. What a pleasant change from the bruality and rape that seem to be the norm lately. 60 year old George

A Tale That Reached the Core of My Being

Young Son:
If your profile is as advertised you have a great literary future ahead of you in what ever venue you choose to publish it in. You truly moved me.

Heart Warming

A truly wonderful story. His wondering what might have happened to her when she said "Please help me" really touches your being. Such a difference her two life paths were.

Great story, Rabbit.

Simply Amazing!

That was such a beautiful story. Amazing writing.

Enjoyed

A great read and emotions.

warm and beautiful, heart melting.

I think

you met every element required of an excellent story. Your writing is, or should be, an example to young writers of how a good story is presented. Your writing was beyond reproach in the fact I found hardly an error and if there were any, they were insignificant and did not detract from the story. Thank you for your time and effort to write this story and most of all for sharing it.

Excellent, Excellent

I really really enjoyed this story! The character development was superb, the sex hot. It was easy to identify with the characters. [Gualterio]

Nice romantic fantasy. I can believe the rescue part. What I can't believe is his hiring her and being allowed to travel with her for work.

Now THAT is a fantasy. The corporate dragons would never approve. Nor was there really any reason (these days) why a secretary or PA would need to travel with him for the purposes stated.

Touching~

A Great Story. I think that this also tells the story of many young hookers out there. They are often in similar plights.

Nice, with room for improvement

The basic story is good and sweet. There are several places where you switched tenses that were awkward. Also, the places where there was tension were kind of glossed over to get back to the happy bits as quickly as possible. It would be a better story if that tension was explored further (i.e. getting away from the pimp, her finally telling her back story, her calling her mom, etc.). Also, I would have liked to have seen more of his sister in the story; he's bound to have told her what was going on, and it would be nice to see that reaction, and possibly the two women meeting.

great story i always like a happy ending.