All Comments on 'Grains'

The beginning stanza is good, then the quality lessens. The rhymes at the end of the second stanza don't particulary work in this piece. The ending needs to be more than a whimper.

The rhyme fits in fine with me and the weakness of the

ending fits the condition and question she (or you) have.

I like it as a 'question' poem we ask ourselves as we grow

older.

I'm sorry to hear of your many health issues. This poem really speaks of ongoing vitality and positive spirit even when the body becomes sluggish.

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 40,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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