All Comments on 'Instinctive Lust'

Your writing painted the picture, and captured the desire unleashed and fulfillment attained.

I love the erotic sensuality, the not-so-subtle building of desires. Very nice!

i absolutely loved this story!!! It felt like I was one of the participants. Keep up the good work

i didn't read the whole thing. after the first few paragraphs i got bored. you are trying to write stories about love right? there is no character details besides the teasing. this is a much more sensual story rather than a sexual one. i didn't like this story, it's not my kind of story, but i am sure this is someone else's perfect kind of story.

Some characterisation would have had a better effect than all the purple prose, not everything needs a simile. You might also benefit from a proofreader.