All Comments on 'The Fenyx Lounge'

Damn that was good. VERY different from the usual bro/sis incest stories. Krista got a lot more money? Discrimination!!!! As if Sean cared. I would dearly ,ove to read more of these two working and loving at the club. Moving in together seems a no brainer but you're the writer. Well done.

3 stars

DragonRider55

That was a fantastic story! I've not read anything like that before now. Interesting story line, so much different than other bro/sis stories. I also enjoyed the complete lack of vulgarities that are so common with most erotica stories. I found the characters to be believable, not uncharacteristically or disproportionately endowed. A real winner in my book! Thank you!

Never read a brother/sister from this angle. Very inventive. Hard to tell that it was just slapped together as you said it was.

Great story! Nice build-up. Compliments all around. Hope for a follow-up.

Hot and fun. No unnecessary drama. Just enough character development.

The build up is obviously key to a story like this, and it was well handled here. Thanks for sharing.

I really can't believe someone has rated this story down based on the author's user icon

and nothing less...great read and hope you'd get inspired to do a sequel for a hot romance to develop in there....thanks

I the story is cool but what keeps me from really liking is I the thought process of this dude and his behavior, he was a wuss for majority of this story.

It's your tale, but if you thought about including Cindy for a threesome in a performance I don't think anyone would complain.

Great build up

loved it through and through. Great stry with believeable characters! Can't wait for more!

I can't remember reading a story as good as this one. I wish it could go on.

More, please. Five stars!

A refreshing twist on sibling sex! The build up was excellent, especially showing aspects of a "normal" life. You effectively avoided the rhetorical trap of "I've always lusted over my sister...etc, etc! 5,!

This is hands down my favorite story I've ever read on this site. I'm always looking for a good accidental incest. Good job.

More please,

Definitely worth of the 5-star rating, I would love to read another chapter, what happened next, does Cindy find out they are brother and sister, does she offer them more for knowingly committing incest, do they start to recognise anyone in the audience.

Fun & sexy story, even if a little slow in beginning build up. But as the brother and sister each were in the financial situation, the logical answer was for them each of them to go to St Fenyx. I didn't think their first night would be with each other, but after amazing fi show by each of with a different partner, they would have been brought back and put together.

Next chapter would add Cindy in three-way, as she seems interested in the sexy bodies of both siblings and how hot they make the audience!!!

Incredibly sexy story. Please continue.

needs a chapter 2

5* From me. I don’t say this often, but I hope you continue on with this story. There could be so many interesting angles to this. Well done!

I enjoyed it, nice story. My only complaint is that Sean seemed to brood and spend to much time beating himself up.

I love incest stories where family membera perform for an audience. Whether it be recorded for underground porn distribution, webcam or in front of a live audience. I wish you could continue the story of these two great characters.

Sean and Krista have great jobs--fucking one another for fun and profit. How much better could it get than that?

Great story. Good luck in the contest.

Not generally my kink of choice, but well written, and I loved it.

... I'd stop having sex with each other *except* at the Fenyx. That's a sweet gig -- close to $300K per year between them! To keep getting invited back, they need to keep the show fresh and exciting. And that means drawing out the "new relationship energy" -- not to mention the mind-blown incest energy -- as long as they can.

And if I were the author, I'd think that those conflicting desires -- for each other vs. for big bucks -- shows great promise for a sequel.

I really liked this story! What a life these two are going to have. Please don't turn this into a threesome if you add a serial - I really think that a serial would not do justice to the original story, anyway.

There were a few mistakes, typos I imagine, but they didn't detract from the quality of the story - a product of rushing, no doubt.

Thank you!

Cause I’d like to see what you have them do next!

In all reality, this story was amazing and I planned on a five star, but date and exhaustion lead to this mishap. For that, I apologize. The story was fantastic, the characters relatable and sex hot. If you keep writing,then I'll reading!

Not usually my thing but very good, the dude was a bit of a dick to his friends but other than that, very good

Lots of comments from gorilla guys but I figured you might want to hear from a woman. OMG, a lesbian at that. This was really wonderfully written. A nice twist on the normal bro/sis Incest story & the writing was excellent. The sex scenes were incredibly hot. It was really good reading about an empathic intelligent man struggling with the Incest issue while the sister was more of a "perv". AL in all this was superb. 5 stars, but you deserve more. Thanks for giving us a really excellent read.

We liked it a lot. The descriptions and scene setting are excellent. We know it's a contest story, but want to know how they end up... -MM

I truly was impressed with the writer and his story telling ability. While reading I had a pleasurable accident inside my trousers. Guess I was thinking about when my younger sister and I had sex so many years ago. I dreamed that my sister Kathy was again riding me and I was lubricating her with my fluids.

You have some good stuff here buddy, its the perfect story for a quick and amzing read, it lacks story and emotion but this is the type of stuff we need on this site

I really enjoyed the detail of this story, it was easy to get into his character with feelings.

..but, considering that you used an editor, there were quite a lot of mistakes left. Maybe it was the short notice, but this is something you might want to look into. That's the only thing, really, the story itself was great.

And yes, I normally take much more time with a piece of writing before posting, and I encouraged my editor to rush since the contest had already started. All of those errors are on me, not her. I will be going through and re editing soon, and will submit the changes so that in the future it will be a smoother read.

SoB

This is your product when you feel rushed?? We should be so lucky for you to feel rushed more often. Well done!

Brilliant, as always. I loved the dramatic irony and the sex was absolutely amazing. My only complaint is that there were a lot of spelling and grammar errors, but those should be easy to clean up.

Found this to be quite entertaining and i think that you should make another edition.

This is an excellent story very hot and it was so good I didn’t even notice any errors!!

Nussin siskon pillua paljaalla.

I liked it a lot. Consensual sex well written not too short or too long. This had little or no mistakes. The kind of story I can give a 5 to.

I've been reading your stories and this it's another great one. I think the ending is great and doesn't need a sequel but if you do decide to make one, I'll definitely read that too! I love your work.

Great story, loved it. I think a sequel could be done with the siblings coming up with different performances each time ?

That was fucking hot. That's all I've got to say about that.

All I can say is fucking hot

That was fucking awesome ..... I imagined me fucking my sister ... Thank u for this awesome experience

ignore the haters, and keep writing. this was every guy/girls fantasy come true/

very good writing, this is every guy/girls fantasy come true, chapter two?

please continue

Absolutely wonderful. Not just erotic, but bordering on insatiable. Thank you

Paul

This was a good read and did a lot to stroke those fantasies.

You are sick, sick, sick and I love it. Keep the good work up.

Excellent. Good writer. Love bro-sis. So does she move into his apartment to save money?

This has got to be about the best incest story I've read. Keep up the good work. Hope there is more and maybe, just maybe, she decided to have a baby by him.

You are one talented author. Keep pumping ‘em out so I can do the same.

I am now going to read every one of you conytibutions and rub myself off - TIME & TIME AGAIN.

Thank you so much Cathy XXX

I'm a little late to the party, and this is the first story of yours that I've read, but I have to say: It's excellent! I loved the premise. I wonder if it's true generally that men in such a position (well, in the general sense, let's not be too literal) would have to much more angst about things than the woman? I loved the way Krista handled the whole thing with her brother. Well done! 5* ~~ JBE

Fantastic!

This is my second story you have published here that I have read. I find you to be a very "tastefully" erotic and one of my top favorites. Please keep them coming!

This is my second story you have published here that I have read. I find you to be a very "tastefully" erotic and one of my top favorites. Please keep them coming!

Wonderful. Need sequel please.

*This* is your impromptu writing?? It really is perhaps one of the best in the genre. Thank you for sharing a story well done.

Encore! Encore!

Loved this,

A truly fantastic story, thanks for sharing.

OUTSTANDING!!!! Great storyline, excellent execution, love it! MORE PLS!!!!

very hot. more like this please

I Love it!!

Thank you!!

Especially the backstory! And how playful and cutsie the sister was! I loved it!

Fantastic storyline! Very entertaining. Loved the details and playful banter.

I wish this did not end it was so good.