will written even though their was a name mix up at the end Dan was called Bud, I hhave enjoyed all of this so far and can't wait for the next part. I do wonder how long it will take for Dan to start to wonder if his wife is being fathful to him. I am sure the signs are there
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Anonymous03/03/05
why
if she didnt want dan or is it bud to begin with why even marry him... oh thats right all larry wants is to fuck her he dont love her just as she dont love dan ... must be his money ...i hope when dan finds out if he dont do something to both of them ,that he at least gets her slimy ass back... me i would make it to my benefit.. take out a very nice insurance policy .... then unfasten her seat belt just before we hit a tree at 100 miles an hour ... she would have just enough time to know i knew and i was the one that was going to have fun now with her dead ... then i would make sure larry knew never to show his face around me again as now i had plenty of money and i knew what an asshole he was so now that jill was dead he could fuck himself.. might be nice to put him in the car also kill two birds with one stone .. and dear this tree is for you ...id fuck them both ... maybe you can think of an appropiate revenge for him 5 years two weeks ago it was 4 ... the way you write next week you can have dan kill them both of after 6 years of screwing him over just as he gets back from his honeymoon...if dan dont get his revenge ill vote 21 on every story you ever write
It is refreshing to read that Jill "loves" Dan, otherwise it would have been hell to pay for poor Danny boy. I can't read it anymore, because I despise Jill & Larry more & more with every chapter that comes out. And it is not entirely because she is cheating on Dan, it is because of the lack of respect that she has for him. That REALLY ticks me off..
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Anonymous03/03/05
10 More years Til Dan or Bud Find Out
These 3 should be locked in a room with the author and 12 terrorists with knives, guns and bombs.
Then six months later (and 107.3 more Chapters) she can walk out and exclaim "I need 13 more cocks, a new Dan(or Bud)for a braindead pitiful husband and a new improved author"
How sick is this pre-wedding cuckolding, wimpy man and his best friend - an unbelieveably sick incoherent muck fuck author!!!
Shameful waste of your time - but it is getting darkly funny in a sad way! How are the scores - hmmm that bad eh
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Anonymous03/04/05
GUESS WHAT....I DIDN'T READ IT AT ALL AT ALL
Just biding my time till year ten...Suggest we all skip until then.
by
Anonymous03/04/05
Great story
Lookin forward to Ch. 5
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Anonymous03/05/05
Will the Story
just keep being a continuation of the "I Love My husband" but I can't fuck anyone and enjoy it except my lover" type story? Will it keep evolving into another cuckold "I want to suck my best friend's cum out of your used pussy" bullshit.
Or, Will it become a great story filled with revenge and a little lesson thrown in for good measure. I like the idea of Jill becoming pregnant with Dan's knowledge after a time. After twins are born, Dan has them DNAd by a friend. It is actually Dan's child but a friend of Dan makes a false report (he finds out that Jill has remained unfaithful to Dan for the whole time of their knowing each other.)to the court that the children are Larry's.
larry likes the pussy but runs like a deer to get away from the responsibility of being a full supporting "daddy"
With no support and two kids to raise by herself, Jill ends up distraught and on welfare in a trailer.
Your writing gets better with each story. A little character changing there at the end but that was still easily picked up on and mind-changed. Other than that, pretty darned goo. I would like to see a lesson story however , than a cum-sucking cuckold, "Oh, I'll do anything to keep from losing you honey" bullshit story.
Jill has some of the slutwife fem-dom traits in her as I picked up quickly on her telling Larry that Danny was to get sloppy seconds on her wedding night.
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Anonymous03/23/05
loving wife? best friend?
With these two Dans needs no enemies, lets just hope he puts an end to thier lives in the next chapter
English
good
will written even though their was a name mix up at the end Dan was called Bud, I hhave enjoyed all of this so far and can't wait for the next part. I do wonder how long it will take for Dan to start to wonder if his wife is being fathful to him. I am sure the signs are there
why
if she didnt want dan or is it bud to begin with why even marry him... oh thats right all larry wants is to fuck her he dont love her just as she dont love dan ... must be his money ...i hope when dan finds out if he dont do something to both of them ,that he at least gets her slimy ass back... me i would make it to my benefit.. take out a very nice insurance policy .... then unfasten her seat belt just before we hit a tree at 100 miles an hour ... she would have just enough time to know i knew and i was the one that was going to have fun now with her dead ... then i would make sure larry knew never to show his face around me again as now i had plenty of money and i knew what an asshole he was so now that jill was dead he could fuck himself.. might be nice to put him in the car also kill two birds with one stone .. and dear this tree is for you ...id fuck them both ... maybe you can think of an appropiate revenge for him 5 years two weeks ago it was 4 ... the way you write next week you can have dan kill them both of after 6 years of screwing him over just as he gets back from his honeymoon...if dan dont get his revenge ill vote 21 on every story you ever write
Dan's Revenge
When will Dan find out and get his revenge?
Can't take it anymore...
It is refreshing to read that Jill "loves" Dan, otherwise it would have been hell to pay for poor Danny boy. I can't read it anymore, because I despise Jill & Larry more & more with every chapter that comes out. And it is not entirely because she is cheating on Dan, it is because of the lack of respect that she has for him. That REALLY ticks me off..
10 More years Til Dan or Bud Find Out
These 3 should be locked in a room with the author and 12 terrorists with knives, guns and bombs.
Then six months later (and 107.3 more Chapters) she can walk out and exclaim "I need 13 more cocks, a new Dan(or Bud)for a braindead pitiful husband and a new improved author"
How sick is this pre-wedding cuckolding, wimpy man and his best friend - an unbelieveably sick incoherent muck fuck author!!!
Shameful waste of your time - but it is getting darkly funny in a sad way! How are the scores - hmmm that bad eh
GUESS WHAT....I DIDN'T READ IT AT ALL AT ALL
Just biding my time till year ten...Suggest we all skip until then.
Great story
Lookin forward to Ch. 5
Will the Story
just keep being a continuation of the "I Love My husband" but I can't fuck anyone and enjoy it except my lover" type story? Will it keep evolving into another cuckold "I want to suck my best friend's cum out of your used pussy" bullshit.
Or, Will it become a great story filled with revenge and a little lesson thrown in for good measure. I like the idea of Jill becoming pregnant with Dan's knowledge after a time. After twins are born, Dan has them DNAd by a friend. It is actually Dan's child but a friend of Dan makes a false report (he finds out that Jill has remained unfaithful to Dan for the whole time of their knowing each other.)to the court that the children are Larry's.
larry likes the pussy but runs like a deer to get away from the responsibility of being a full supporting "daddy"
With no support and two kids to raise by herself, Jill ends up distraught and on welfare in a trailer.
Your writing gets better with each story. A little character changing there at the end but that was still easily picked up on and mind-changed. Other than that, pretty darned goo. I would like to see a lesson story however , than a cum-sucking cuckold, "Oh, I'll do anything to keep from losing you honey" bullshit story.
Jill has some of the slutwife fem-dom traits in her as I picked up quickly on her telling Larry that Danny was to get sloppy seconds on her wedding night.
loving wife? best friend?
With these two Dans needs no enemies, lets just hope he puts an end to thier lives in the next chapter
With a friend like Larry, Dan already has an enemy....
Let's hope Dan will get smart and get revenge.
Thanks for the effort.
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