Good story idea but it ended too quickly. You could have ended the story after after you fucked her ass for the first time.
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Anonymous03/09/05
WOW
How about MORE of this one, ADD to it!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous05/06/05
MO' ASS
LOOK U ARE ONE OF THE BEST WRITERS OF INCEST/ANAL STORIES THAT LITEROTICA HAS. MAKE 'EM LONGER AND MORE DETAILED, AND SUBMIT WITH MORE FREQUENCEY. YOU HAVE FANS TO CONSIDER!
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Anonymous05/31/05
Great job!!
You had a great beginning..middle ...but the end came to fast...i would have liked to have seen what happened while he was fucking her mother...what she said, and why she was so open to her son fucking her...I've read all ur work cant wait for new chapters and stories
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Anonymous11/25/05
end too quickly
Really loved the story but ended sort of abruptly fo me. Now if there was a continuation....
English
Short, simple, and almost straight to the point
I guess that's one way to ensure there's a next generation.
Love it.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
I'm in love
beautiful!!!!!!!
hahaha
are you sure this shouldn't be in the humor section? made me laugh!
Try again
Boring and puerile
stupid
You started out GREAT. But, the ending was too quick and just totally inadequate. Surely, you can do better.
Good Start
Can't wait for the next chapter
Oh Dear
What a sad little gayboy you are, is it all you can think about delving in shit, try gay weekly or some other site but please NOT here
Too short of a tail!
Good story idea but it ended too quickly. You could have ended the story after after you fucked her ass for the first time.
WOW
How about MORE of this one, ADD to it!!!!!!!!!
MO' ASS
LOOK U ARE ONE OF THE BEST WRITERS OF INCEST/ANAL STORIES THAT LITEROTICA HAS. MAKE 'EM LONGER AND MORE DETAILED, AND SUBMIT WITH MORE FREQUENCEY. YOU HAVE FANS TO CONSIDER!
Great job!!
You had a great beginning..middle ...but the end came to fast...i would have liked to have seen what happened while he was fucking her mother...what she said, and why she was so open to her son fucking her...I've read all ur work cant wait for new chapters and stories
end too quickly
Really loved the story but ended sort of abruptly fo me. Now if there was a continuation....
Ho Hum
Started off ok then it was like you were running late for the bus or something, the ending lacked any thought & was just rushed ruined the whole thing
Ho Hum
Started off ok then it was like you were running late for the bus or something, the ending lacked any thought & was just rushed ruined the whole thing
we need more
ok great story but i have to say you should have a part two
Short Story
Wham! Bam! Thank you, ma'm!
Composition
Part one wasn't long enough to be a chapter. Haven't looked at 'chapter' two yet, but I think the whole story should have been one complete episode.
Juicy aaaaaasssss
Paul shove your tounge in her winking asshole had gape it open. Eat tht rosebud
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