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I don't usually comment...
...on poems that I don't give a 100 to. I don't feel qualified enough to offer any suggestions to make them better. The same applies here, but there are some lines that are so powerful that I felt I had to aknowledge them. They are:
'My passion casting
Shadows on the wall'
'Like a thundercloud
Battling a tornado
In the middle of a raging river'
'and feel the darkness roll back..'
I loved these lines, but the rest seemed like a different poem.
Such words...
My my my. How very evocative and erotic.
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