beautiful, as always, Angeline.
Very nice work. ~Imp
this falling awakened
like a poem oft read
Love those lines. Very nice poem, A.
...........a sweet, sad truth in poem-form. You know how to phrase your feelings beautifully, Ange.
that ours was not
a blind leap over the ledge
of reason where fingers slip
from dreams that will not be,
but built with waking days
So well written. Just lovely.
of the wife and myself. This is really powerful if your
world is tied to the one you want and need. I'm still working on the title, but I love the poem, my favorite
verse was the third, but the whole poem was loved. sandspike
Tender touches of the soul~
In your poem it shows!
these lines do not fit well with the flow of the others.
"corporeal not contemplated
but consumed privately,
consummated with no one"
"the breadth and depth
worked nicely in some areas, but seemed to slip too much into prose in a few areas. It recovered nicely though and flowed smoothly to a wonderful completion. I love:
"...and how close
the space we've made
jim : )
I most definitely enjoyed reading this. I just felt the lines were a bit uneven, which caused the flow to be a little rocky in places. I hope you appreciated the honesty as much as I enjoyed your poem.
every time it got more nice!
I loved the distinction drawn between corporeal truth and speculation; a womnderful poem.
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