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by Anonymous

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by 03/04/05

Not bad but

I felt that I wanted more with this piece.

This thru me off a bit:
But she's words, foam on the ocean

I hope you appreciate the honesty.
sal

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by shereads03/05/05

Perfect.

You should do this more often.

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by Jennifer C03/05/05

I agree with sal

I thought this was a good effort but that line threw me too

But she's words, foam on the ocean

I think this has potential though ~ J

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by minsue03/26/05

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Delicate and delectable.

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