by Babygirlmindy
Mindy,
Nice job with the audio story. You are way too nice tho, you let him off way too easy. You are not nearly malicious enough for the horrible thing he did to you. You should kick his butt to the curb, he doesn't deserve you.
Keep writing.
The conflict that allowed you to Turn the Tables at the start made me nervous. That said, once you began the erotic Domination, the whole thing became much more fun. I found the continued uses of the names, “Daddy,” and “Baby Girl” a little confusing or at least a dampener on the Dominance/submission SWITCH you were working to create. I would have enjoyed you calling yourself “Mommy,” “Mistress,” or “Queen “; and refereeing to Daddy as “Baby Boy,” “subbie”, or some other diminutive or even degradation, “Weasel,” “Worm,” or “Cheater.” The line, something like, “I own this cock,” was Dominant, powerful and sexy.
Changing names might have created more of the tension that made me nervous. But it also might have added excitement to the story. Will this role reversal be permanent? How can Daddy regain Baby Girl’s trust, and get his hand back on her leash, her reigns? Maybe that’s a question that can be explored and answered in a short sequel.
Your acting and improv are very good. You have a very sexy voice, not just when you’re doing that Baby Girl giggle, but also when you drop down into your demanding, commanding chest voice purr to a growl of deep desire and Dominance.
I really liked this one!
Your voice is perfect. I love the way it changes just enough reflect your mood and emotion. And I especially love that giggle. As cute as it was the first time I heard it I felt it might be able to be interpreted as ominous or sinister. I was right. Those later giggles would have me a little nervous if I was Daddy.
I also know that if I was Daddy that Baby Girl would be in for a serious hand on throat, raw lust, I'm in control fucking until I was satisfied later!
Great work.
I loved the switch. Very believable and true to your character. And that voice, well, you already know what that does to me
very very good, your voice is lovely, but very difficult to listen too (at least for me it is) but that just makes it more believable. One day I may even get to the end without feeling a total s*** and it's not even about me :) . Well Done
OMG. That was just fantastic. This is my first story from you but I think you may have just become my favorite. But I feel so guilty because I want to be your daddy. But I want you to be my granddaughter because I've actually always have the hots for her LOL