It is a fun read. A non- traditional page turner. Should be required reading for writng stududents as fundamental representation of structure, plot, character intro and development, tension positioning, comic relief, dangling drama , hot fun, and closure amongst other techniques. Mahog18
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Anonymous05/21/12
More please.
I think there should be at least two more chapters. In the first one and after some sort of wedding Alisa should change her name to Alisa Simonsen and becoming Tawnya's wife. Then in a second chapter and after finding a suitable donnor first Alisa then Tawnya should get pregnant.
Thanks for this wonderful story.
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Anonymous07/02/12
amazing story!
At first I was hesitant about reading these stories seeing how many chapter it had but once I started reading the first one I was smitten! One of the best stories I've read. It has a great combination of romance, sex and drama. Well done, hope you'll continue providing us with plenty more great stories!
English
Utterly superb,the whole sequence of stories
Wonderfully paced, great storyline, and great sex. I just wish I could meet them and have them as friends.
hot_robin
Lovely
I loved everything about your whole story. It had the perfect mixture of romance, hurt, and of course sex. Very enjoyable :).
Diana
Girlfriend818@hotmail.com
Captain Of Her Heart is the captain of my heart!
Great story, your mix of love, drama, and sex in each chapter kept me on the edge of my seat. Easily one of the best stories ive read. Amazing job!
that was great
That was a wonderful series - stumbled onto the first one and then had to read the rest! nicely descriptive and very hot!
x
readit
It is a fun read. A non- traditional page turner. Should be required reading for writng stududents as fundamental representation of structure, plot, character intro and development, tension positioning, comic relief, dangling drama , hot fun, and closure amongst other techniques. Mahog18
More please.
I think there should be at least two more chapters. In the first one and after some sort of wedding Alisa should change her name to Alisa Simonsen and becoming Tawnya's wife. Then in a second chapter and after finding a suitable donnor first Alisa then Tawnya should get pregnant.
Thanks for this wonderful story.
amazing story!
At first I was hesitant about reading these stories seeing how many chapter it had but once I started reading the first one I was smitten! One of the best stories I've read. It has a great combination of romance, sex and drama. Well done, hope you'll continue providing us with plenty more great stories!
Amazing
That was amazing from start to finish . Please continue this for me please , it too good not to
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