Just a fanasy but sick, one I would not like to cum to pass... all that snow and ice ukkk
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Anonymous03/22/05
Useless
Utterly bland and dumb.
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Anonymous03/23/05
Interesting
This was an interesting and different story line. True it leads to the same end that all of them do - sex, but this futuristic direction shows some new originality. I'll look forward to your future submissions. Don't make them two or three months apart like some writers do.
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Anonymous03/23/05
First Offering - Well Written But
Constructively - Original thinking and probably close to geologically what will happen but then the twisted contorted cuckolding capitulation didn't sell well - especially to the non-turned on male and husband readers - oh some sickies will love you but most normal males / husbands and wives won't relate to your male character - when thier wives and especially thier daughters are given up for the black cocks - sort of self indulgent cuckolding for a selfish cause.
Oh, you got there but not plausibly. Fantasy we like but a touch of life's reality is necessary for entertainment reasons. Better in science fiction perhaps but still negative vibes for most us.
You are talented but perhaps you know yourself better than you know this audience?
So now what? Story Continuation is your choice but the scores will go down as you will see.
Perhaps better to consider non-marital or if so cheating with eventual spousal awareness followed normally by consequence - failing that it's back inthe non-reality soup and bad comments and scores. Or 3somes, or swinging done with balance and sharing. Please think about it as we need more good authors in reasonable balanced themes where there are some good characters to applaud - no winners in yours is there! Your choice isn't it! Please consider.
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Anonymous03/23/05
love it
the whole idea to start with was great, please don't stop
I enjoyed the build up of your climactic end. It held my attention all the way through. And I do hope you are not discouraged by those who should send their negative comment to you in a pm rather than posting them for everyone to read. Hope to read more from you.
Not popular, but many predictions about the future aren't. Keep writing.
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Anonymous12/20/05
A WONDERFUL FANTASY
A wonderful and wonderfully PERVERSE fantasy!I love the thought of Mister Mgtofomo's ENVIABLE job! And the dignified and business-like way he goes about living a "sex maniac's" dream!
It is conceivable that the rich black Africans might want certain white women as their "mahawaras" -- concubines or harem girls! -- even though they were not "cooperative" with Mister Mgtofomo. In my own fantasy, however, I prefer to think that Mister Mgtofomo does ineed wield absolute power over the women's hope for their future and I greatly enjoy imagining that he continues to playfully yet fiercely exploit this power for his sexual pleasure!
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Anonymous12/21/05
A TERRIFIC EROTIC TALE!
A terrific erotic tale but A NEW BEGINNING's ENDING comes too early! My imagination is enflamed by thoughts of Karen's African future.
Does she know anything about David's projected employer? The story gives no specific information except that he has MANY white mahawara -- an authentic Swahili word meaning "concubine", I have learned!
I am VERY curious about who and what awaits Karen in Africa. Most certainly she will become very well-acquainted with the African employer's black cock but what "special" tastes and fantasies might she have to indulge? Is her own initiative show of "subservience" a teasing clue?!
So I hope for "more" but whether or not there is to be any continuation of A NEW BEGINNING, I offer grateful thanks to 3DIPPER for a terrific story!
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Anonymous12/22/05
A TERRIFIC EROTIC TALE
A terrific erotic tale but A NEW BEGINNING's ENDING comes too eraly! My imagination is enflamed by thoughts of Karen's African future. Does she know anything about David projected employer? The story gives no specific information about him except that he has MANY white mahawara - an authentic Swahili word for "concubine", I have learned!
I am VERY curious about who and what awaits Karen in Africa. Most certainly she will become very well acquainted with the African employer's black cock but what "special" tastes and fantasies might she have to indulge? Is her own initiative show of "subservience" a teasing clue?!
So I hope for "more" but whether or not there is to be any continuation of A NEW BEGINNING, I offer grateful thanks to 3DIPPER for a terrific erotic tale!
In addition to the delightfully debauched meeting between Karen and Mr. Mgtofomo, the plot enflames the reader's imagination with a limitless complex of white females opening their arms, legs and pussies to zestful black African hard-ons! As perfectly normal behavior!
Just think of the infinity of grotesque sexy incidents as countless white women HAVE TO make their bodies available to "who knows how many" black African sexual predators!
The mere thought of the goings-on at the embassy -- where throngs of white females varying in age from late teens to early forties MUST constantly offer the soft, white flesh to leanly fit and virile black men -- is a special lewd thrill!
And we're left to imagine -- if we can! -- the infinite orgy of black male - white female fornication in the "African Union"!
A New Beginning is a classicly powerful sexual fantasy!
English
sick
Just a fanasy but sick, one I would not like to cum to pass... all that snow and ice ukkk
Useless
Utterly bland and dumb.
Interesting
This was an interesting and different story line. True it leads to the same end that all of them do - sex, but this futuristic direction shows some new originality. I'll look forward to your future submissions. Don't make them two or three months apart like some writers do.
First Offering - Well Written But
Constructively - Original thinking and probably close to geologically what will happen but then the twisted contorted cuckolding capitulation didn't sell well - especially to the non-turned on male and husband readers - oh some sickies will love you but most normal males / husbands and wives won't relate to your male character - when thier wives and especially thier daughters are given up for the black cocks - sort of self indulgent cuckolding for a selfish cause.
Oh, you got there but not plausibly. Fantasy we like but a touch of life's reality is necessary for entertainment reasons. Better in science fiction perhaps but still negative vibes for most us.
You are talented but perhaps you know yourself better than you know this audience?
So now what? Story Continuation is your choice but the scores will go down as you will see.
Perhaps better to consider non-marital or if so cheating with eventual spousal awareness followed normally by consequence - failing that it's back inthe non-reality soup and bad comments and scores. Or 3somes, or swinging done with balance and sharing. Please think about it as we need more good authors in reasonable balanced themes where there are some good characters to applaud - no winners in yours is there! Your choice isn't it! Please consider.
love it
the whole idea to start with was great, please don't stop
Your story was good...
I enjoyed the build up of your climactic end. It held my attention all the way through. And I do hope you are not discouraged by those who should send their negative comment to you in a pm rather than posting them for everyone to read. Hope to read more from you.
Good Premise and good story
Not popular, but many predictions about the future aren't. Keep writing.
A WONDERFUL FANTASY
A wonderful and wonderfully PERVERSE fantasy!I love the thought of Mister Mgtofomo's ENVIABLE job! And the dignified and business-like way he goes about living a "sex maniac's" dream!
It is conceivable that the rich black Africans might want certain white women as their "mahawaras" -- concubines or harem girls! -- even though they were not "cooperative" with Mister Mgtofomo. In my own fantasy, however, I prefer to think that Mister Mgtofomo does ineed wield absolute power over the women's hope for their future and I greatly enjoy imagining that he continues to playfully yet fiercely exploit this power for his sexual pleasure!
A TERRIFIC EROTIC TALE!
A terrific erotic tale but A NEW BEGINNING's ENDING comes too early! My imagination is enflamed by thoughts of Karen's African future.
Does she know anything about David's projected employer? The story gives no specific information except that he has MANY white mahawara -- an authentic Swahili word meaning "concubine", I have learned!
I am VERY curious about who and what awaits Karen in Africa. Most certainly she will become very well-acquainted with the African employer's black cock but what "special" tastes and fantasies might she have to indulge? Is her own initiative show of "subservience" a teasing clue?!
So I hope for "more" but whether or not there is to be any continuation of A NEW BEGINNING, I offer grateful thanks to 3DIPPER for a terrific story!
A TERRIFIC EROTIC TALE
A terrific erotic tale but A NEW BEGINNING's ENDING comes too eraly! My imagination is enflamed by thoughts of Karen's African future. Does she know anything about David projected employer? The story gives no specific information about him except that he has MANY white mahawara - an authentic Swahili word for "concubine", I have learned!
I am VERY curious about who and what awaits Karen in Africa. Most certainly she will become very well acquainted with the African employer's black cock but what "special" tastes and fantasies might she have to indulge? Is her own initiative show of "subservience" a teasing clue?!
So I hope for "more" but whether or not there is to be any continuation of A NEW BEGINNING, I offer grateful thanks to 3DIPPER for a terrific erotic tale!
Very Creative
A very crative story. You have a great imagination coming up with such a unique way for a white woman to be with a black man.
Very Creative
A very crative story. You have a great imagination coming up with such a unique way for a white woman to be with a black man.
More More More........
I Love This Story!
I love this story!
In addition to the delightfully debauched meeting between Karen and Mr. Mgtofomo, the plot enflames the reader's imagination with a limitless complex of white females opening their arms, legs and pussies to zestful black African hard-ons! As perfectly normal behavior!
Just think of the infinity of grotesque sexy incidents as countless white women HAVE TO make their bodies available to "who knows how many" black African sexual predators!
The mere thought of the goings-on at the embassy -- where throngs of white females varying in age from late teens to early forties MUST constantly offer the soft, white flesh to leanly fit and virile black men -- is a special lewd thrill!
And we're left to imagine -- if we can! -- the infinite orgy of black male - white female fornication in the "African Union"!
A New Beginning is a classicly powerful sexual fantasy!
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