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It's becoming a cliche to write thinly-veiled counters to Loving Wives stories and pass them off as "humor/satire" or "loving wives" stories. If you have issues with cheating women, wimpy husbands, or both, fine. But surely there is a more original way to get attention than to write another one of these stories? It has become a cliche, no longer something "original" or "funny".
Ignore the last guy
I enjoyed it. Not your best effort, but okay. I certainly prefer you take to the standard "happy to be a cuckold" fare.
budd100 Tell the last two guys to go to hell !
I liked this straight forward story of cheating and retrabution. As I haved served myself, I know that a cheating partner is 10 times worst in these type of situations . You need the support and comfort of knowing ,that while you are fighting for country , you are being suported emotionially by your freinds and family. This is what makes these types of betrayal the worst kind. As for the two air heads complaints: 1) I think that the site picks the section that a story is displayed in. 2) For this being a repeat on many other stories,are not all stories similar when dealing with human emotions?? We only have a limited number of responses to lifes problems. I liked the story and have enjoyed many of your other stories. Keep up the good work.
Consequentually Great
Thanks for your position and story about the oftentimes forgoten realities of life. Your "you play you pay" is appreciated against the non-recognized jaded pitiful cheaters who wander through this site against the grain of life.
More please - thanks for your time, efforts and talent - Regards
Like The Story
I loved the ending where he dropped his brother. He should have followed it up with a toe to the balls - really make the sucker pay.
H/S?
Not at all a bad story if a trifle short, but what the hell is supposed to be humorous about it?
Good Story
I really enjoyed the story.
continue story please.
I shure wish you continued with the story i would like to know why she passed him over for Frank ?
I hope he didnt give her any money .
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
Good premise... sweet opening... lacks "meat"
I liked the premise of your story. Deployment offers numerous hardships, both foreseen and the unexpected, and the toll placed on relationships is huge. I like how the protagonist was even set-up as joining to accommodate the family's financial situation, essentially enabling the brother to continue with college. The meeting with the female lead was cute.
I would have liked more "meat"... some more internals as to the transition to the brother... the family's response (after all, with the first marriage so close before deployment the protagonist's famliy had to have been involved and aware of the girl on a close basis... upon his return the mother came across as it would be natural for the brother and his wife to come over... odd)
For such a huge betrayal the female lead seemed overly cold and short... and the "retribution" was too blaise... a couple punches and leaving town... It just seemed to warrant (and need) soooo much more.
In brief... I felt built up from the good opening and then left feeling hollow at the quick change and ending.
good story
what a bitch! And to use his car and bank account! I can't believe his mom was so blase about the whole thing. She had to know that what was going on. He should have done more to his brother. Hell, his mom and dad may have deserved some payback for not letting him know/allowing them to use his car, whatever. Seems like his brother was the favored child.
Very nice
A story plot that occurred more than once in realiy... With me it was my miltary roommate. Very short and neat.
Part 2?
Please?
This is a Reality Show....
It happens all the time to those who leave others behind for a long period of time..
Usually the best friend is the guilty party, but you would expect a brother to take your back.... and not your fiancé
Parents
A good story, though I'm unclear about the parents. I am assuming they knew he was engaged before he left for Iraq, and I'm going to also assume they knew who he was engaged to. I would think they would have some guilt about sending their oldest to college, but to also not make any deal about the oldest then stealing his fiance, and even acting as if it is no big deal - I don't understand. Either his parents are the absolutely most clueless people in the world, or the story is somewhat incomplete. A good story otherwise, I just felt the parents could have been fleshed out. Thanks for writing.
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Humor? WTF?! This author must be a fucking retard to put this shit in humor.
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