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by twelveoone03/13/05

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the Horror! the Horror!
sometimes keep your ears open, before you start kickin ass.
you have the title of the tune right, yeah.

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by Anonymous03/13/05

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Simplicity here is the key... the title works well with the poem. Many complex emotional and rhetorical issues addressed here (fangy grin) but I like the ending of this work.. it speaks volumes in the message of letting go, as the cat says??? NO????
Quote:
I shrug
squeeze into a slot
rattle my say
turn away

stretch my arms wide
as I turn and look out my window
across the open field
at the tranquil river
flowing by

Maybe I'll write today!
The silence broken when
the cat speaks "NOOOOO"

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by dcpoet4403/13/05

nice title...

and right to the point and rings so true. my favorite spot is:

I might have even got bitch slapped
I don't know
it didn't hurt

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by Wanton Vixxxen03/13/05

I play the same tune...

and you have the line, "I got bumped" right where it should be - first. How well we know that lyric - you're on aoHell like Me. Very clever poem, Art - almost as clever as your cat. .

Vixxx

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by Anonymous03/13/05

LMAO

Yep that would be you, only I don't think to many could bitch slap you and get away with it. And shadow demanding attention these days, Pet the kitty Art.

Nin:)

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by Jennifer C03/13/05

Bravo!

An absolutley cracking poem Art, loved it! Very accurate and humourus I loved

Maybe I'll write today!
The silence broken when
the cat speaks "NOOOOO"

My cat does that too!
~ J

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by Anonymous03/14/05

You had me at....

bitch slapped! 5

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by 03/15/05

Although this is about PC

I can see it also applying to life and criticism in general. Ah.. we roll with it and use it eh?

Nice work, you get better with every new write and it's good to see the progression ;)

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by LuciousBi-Writes4U03/19/05

ohhh how true!

toooo cute! LOVED IT and how true in life as well! :)

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