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Leave writing to grown-ups, or at least to people with an IQ over 75!
Great story
I really enjoyed this story and am looking forward to the next instalment if there is one ?
Please don't be discouraged by that previous comment from another reader. We all have different tastes and I for one, thoroughly enjoyed your writing style.
All the best
Steve
Pretty Good
That was a great story. I love the fact all that was going on while there was like 14 girls in the room. If you have anymore, please post.
poor
Not a very believable story. A terrible 'plot', and poorly written. Go away and practice before you feel the need to publish another effort.
erotic . . .
. . . and that's what we want. A little mutual masturbation done surreptitiously at night. For those two critics, were you hoping for Walt Whitman or William Shakespeare maybe? Jeez, it's only three girls who just want to jill off!
Hope there is a part 2. Your 2 critics can *# off
This is a very nice effort.
I don't know who the self appointed experts are that posted such nasty critisism, but that kind of comment is uncalled for, even if they did not like the story. Didn't see any suggestions from either as to what they did not like or a way to improve. So ignore the ignorant. Eh?
Thank you for the erotic entertainment. You rock!
loved it
i could picture each move!
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