Nice story. Too short. I feel like there are three stories, each jambed into its own paragraph. Hope you can tell us more about these people.
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nice story. a little too short
Nice story. Too short. I feel like there are three stories, each jambed into its own paragraph. Hope you can tell us more about these people.
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