All Comments on 'Picture Me ... Again'

by M. Millswan

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maddictmaddictover 5 years ago
Brilliant, the flash bulb as well

I hope there's more film in that shutter box of yours. Any chance you might illustrate one of your stories with your photographs

HamsterHamsterover 5 years ago
An interesting start.

Well set up but it left us as completely in the dark as the hero. No reflection about where he was or how he got there, only a hot fuck. With an abrupt end like that there had better be another installment, and pronto!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Lots of Good Stuff Here

Ok. So.

Marilyn Mansfield might have met Eubie Blake in 1921. His Shuffle Along was a big hit on Broadway the following year. And it was revived in the following decade at the Mansfield theater - coincidence or authorial brilliance?

Your story is sweet and has legs. You imply a follow up in the 1st paragraph when he (Tom?) tells us that he is preparing for a photo-shoot in the morning.

What happened? Did you fall out of love with your characters or concept?

C’mon guy...you can do this.

AnonymousAnonymous10 months ago

Good potential unrealized. I don’t know where this was meant to go, but it didn’t get there.

Bill S.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 month ago

I love the brevity of a well written

“ Short Story.” The author must capture

enough detail and emotion and not clutter

it with unnecessary words. As for the ending,

Its often left open for the reader to develop

the end which they what or one which is implied.

This particular story is wonderfully constructed

and has a unique plot.

Well done.

shr

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Many readers have asked about where to find other stories I have written. Professionally, I write erotica under the pen name: M. Millswan. You can find all of my books, including Snap Shots (with all 3 stories) at www.farlightpress.com. I got my writing career started on Lit...