by CandaK
I'm sorry, but that was a weak start. I really hope you have something better planned for this story.
My honest opinion, decent start, but because it only one page was posted, I'm a little disappointed. The reasons others are being rude is because they were horny, and expected more action. As a fellow writer, I simply suggest posting the entire story once it is written for better feedback.
I think it was good, you should continue. It seems like it’ll be a decent story.