All Comments on 'Mustang Betrayal'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Simply awful writing

There is NO star in this mess. Did you even bother to proof read this train wreck? Thoroughly unlikable characters, ugly dialogue and zero plot left us with nothing worth while to read.

No stars.

tazz317tazz317over 5 years ago
A REVERSE CUCK AND A GIGOLO

a marriage created as a farcical comedic skit, TK U MLJV LV NV

tazz317tazz317over 5 years ago
BEST NOT STANG STAR 06 HEAR OF YOU DISSING THE TANG

what else will he want that Ashley has to provide, TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
1*

What a piece of shit

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Punctuating Dialogue 101

When one paragraph ends with a quotation mark and the very next one starts with a mark, that indicates the character speaking has changed. When one character is speaking and is not uninterrupted by narrative or another character talking, every paragraph starts with a mark, but only the last one has a closing mark.

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If a paragraph doesn’t begin with a quotation mark, that indicates it’s narrative.

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Sbrooks103ySbrooks103yover 5 years ago
Not a classic tale

The writing wasn't the best but the situation was pretty good. Loved the fact that everyone got what they wanted out of it. Nothing beats a muscle car and a slutty wife. Cheers!

27thNC27thNCover 5 years ago
Stop with the political bullshit you dumb fucks

It's a porn site. No one gives a shit about your politics on here. Go rant somewhere else. This is all about having a slutty wife get some dick.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
"And then he shoved that big, black cock into my pussy hammering my cervix with every thrust, staying hard for what seemed like hours."

I stopped there, why the fuck do so many writers, who can only be MEN insist on hitting/hammering the cervix, its fucking painful, doesn't give pleasure, so clearly written by a brain dead male.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
0 stars

would be better, maybe even a negative star. you are fucked up see a shrink 'cause you really need help. paying someone to gain an advantage over your wife is really, really screwed up. NO LOVE THERE asshole

Impo_65Impo_65over 5 years ago
Hahaha you did it.

You managed to piss off the whiny little trolls twofold. You wrote about a wife who had sex with another man *gasp* AND you dared to have that be a black man. the horror!

Thanks for that. Maybe a couple of them will have an aneurysm and the frequency of thei bullshit comments will drop off. Even if they don't it's just nice to know they are all fuming and trying to figure out more ways to call this "garbage cuck shit." Keep it up!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Nope. Cuck shit.

There was no cheating in a marriage here. This was not about an idiotic black guy fantasy. This was about humiliation. Fetish shit should be in fetish.

TwentysevenTwentysevenover 5 years ago
Lighten Up, People

Well, I guess you learnt your lesson. Nobody here has a sense of humour. I thought it was well done and just the right length for its type.

etchiboyetchiboyover 5 years ago
Hilarious

4-stars

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Mustang

the only decent mustang is the one with a stick

Impo_64Impo_64over 5 years ago
A real romantic tale...

A real romantic tale...Pity it's so bad and sick...1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Finally

Cute fun short witty and the bitch finally used as she should be 5 stars.

gunhilltraingunhilltrainover 5 years ago
Very nice car

I've always had a thing for Mustang convertibles.

avengerfiveavengerfiveover 5 years ago
Phenomenal!!!

Actually, I prefer the fastback with manual trans, but every other thing was PERFECT!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Unbelievable

Christ almighty another brain dead hack who doesn’t have a pair of balls. Please give me back the 5 minutes i wasted in your dumbfuck story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Well done.

Thank you Mr. Anonymous for saving my 4 and half minutes. I have only wasted 30 seconds to read your comments.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
you write good trailer trash stories

no soul in your writings.

FantasyTrainFantasyTrainabout 5 years ago
Garbage!!

Sounds like something from Jerry Springer!

Survey says...........................FAIL!

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Mustang

Ford made a GT mustang in ‘66? The v-8 engine was a 289cid, not 5 liter

LT56linebackerLT56linebackerover 3 years ago
Stupid fricking story...

NO broad is worth a 1966 HI-Performance, 271 hp mustang. Than kgod the Bears better half is a lady , not a broad. The Bear DOES NOT approve .0 stars if I could.

The BEAR

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

ONE STAR. All garbage stories get that automatically.

RanDog025RanDog025over 2 years ago

Shit story, as usual. Done with this author! No stars, ever!

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