All Comments on 'Forbidden Bikini Teen'

by TheChasmOfJokes

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Believable Story Until Final Paragraphs.

Story was spoiled by supposed participation of girl's friend/aunt and anal action.

horny2doithorny2doitover 5 years ago

A different but HOT story. Interesting connection with a stranger but the way you worded this story brought more intense actions and reactions as a nice build up. So hot when they both came at the same time at first contact. A second story about who Simone really is and if she is a native or tourist like he is. Thank to !!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

A wisp of a hot idea, but ham-handed execution with a ridiculous twist at the end. Work on exposition.

TheChasmOfJokesTheChasmOfJokesover 5 years agoAuthor
That ending...

Thanks for feedback. You're right about that ending - I knew it was a bit ridiculous. I still think there are a few nice moments in here, but perhaps a story I should have just kept for myself.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
5 stars until the last paragraph

Fabulously sexy story with great buildup but should’ve left the aunt for another story. c

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