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A good start
I will be looking forward to the next posting of this story, for it has a lot of potenchal. well done & well wrote Rovergirl
Hellkite
heres some tips :)
it started out awesomely but it was way too short....if your making one like that at least do us all a favor and have chapter 2 out in like a day or the same day would be even better :) (just telling ya the nice way cuz your probably gonna get seriously flamed but dont get me wrong i'm interested and want to see whats gonna happen next good story line.
A nice start
Really enjoyed it even if it was a little short, i hope you continue :)
Very Good
Well done; great start!
Huge potential - could he perhaps create a partner for his fight? A girl better than we've seen.. one who is younger, yet draws strength from their love-making (sneaking in an erotic element!)
The permutaions of the 3 characters could be endless :)
A good start
I will be looking forward to the next posting of this story, for it has a lot of "potential". well done & well wrote Rovergirl
Hellkite
Sorry for the misspelling of potential
!!!!
Continue please!
down right awesome
this was expertly written and gives off a huge amount of possibilities. i am eager to see where this leads.
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