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Givers and Takers
Hard sometimes to know whether you can ask for love and get something back that is as honest as love freely given without the hint.
As far as style, I was trouble at first by the someone (not just anyone phrasing, but the more I read it, the more I liked it because of the rhythmic repetition.
Spoke to me
I can relate to the words of this poem. You say it so eloquently. :)
Mute...
speaks volumes about the silent need to be noticed and loved.
Imp~
this is lovely. The title is perfect.
~Syn
A consumate rendition
of that sometimes overpowering yearning, that desire for someone (not just anyone) to love you........it resonates deeply inside me, and echoes my own enforced mute state.
A powerful, yet gentle piece. Mat xxxx
Beautifully Non-traditional...
...and a solid piece about the uncertainties we all face in relationships both old and new, casual and formal, defined and open to interpretation. This resonates within me.
I know what you mean
Because I'm on the other side of your poem I know what you mean. I am the "not just anyone". Sadly. I hope your "not just anyone" sees how special you really are and does decide to sacrafice anything for you. I have made that choice for my special someone and have never been happier. I know they would do the same for me and your poem shows the same in you. You would sacrafice anything for this person.
You express perfectly the emotions as well as the imagery of what your trying to convey. The format lends itself well to your point...allowing the reader short intermissions to really "think" about what you are saying. By leaving in the small gaps, one can't overlook any of the detail your trying to impress. Well done.
you really
touched close to home with this one...very well done. Sabina
Beautiful
Your work never fails to reach me. I can identify with the silence - not wanting to ask, fearing to ask, hoping you don't have to ask - and the belief that love is, or should be, freely given. Thanks, Imp. LJ
beautifully written
I relate to this completely. Well done, Imp!
Not just anyone...
could write this exquisite piece and make it reach out from the screen and tug at the heart like you can, imp. I still feel the heart's strings pulling as I write the comment.
Simply beautiful!
Vixxx
not just anyone ...
could write such a masterpiece, a real pearl of a poem, I am totally impressed
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Painful, lonely and gray is this work. Lost in the pugatory of a desperate voice... powerful in the simplicity of the desires that all hold so close to their souls.. very well done Imp..
Du Lac~
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The last stanza left me breathless.
I can relate
My silence has been broken, however, because I have found my someone (not just anyone)... or should I say he's found me. :) ~Minx
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