All Comments on 'Camping with My Older Sister'

Very nice, but not very bratty.

Good start to a story. Keep it going with more chapters. I can see this going in a good direction. Thanks for your time and effort.

I liked the story, but the title of it threw me off. I was expecting something totally different from the story.

They hiked all day before spending the night and she thinks his cock is gonna taste good. Thats as far as I got!

Did I miss something?

I liked that story .Thank you

Okay, I guess. But why was "Bratty" used in the title?

I loved everything about your story. Hope there are more.

Need more chapters about Carol and her brother. Something involving a romantic dinner date or weekend vacation involving a hotel suite. 5 Stars.

My best friend is my older sister. She taught me how to eat pussy (hers), she got my virginity (she was married and on birth control) that was 48 years ago. She is the best lover I have ever had. She has been married twice and has one daughter, which I just found out I am the father.

Sorry - my sister is a brat, but I haven't shared how and why that is yet, but will in the next chapter.

I've asked the mods to update the title - sorry for misleading you, and thank you for reading!

What is this, an alternate script for a shitty porn? How is this even a story?

Don't know why you called her bratty, but it cost you one star.

Nice

I could see that term applying to the story if if was from her point of view. Him being eight years younger would be more in line with the concept of a bratty sibling.

So you knew before you posted this it was only the start, but you couldn't be bothered to use a chapter number to inform (warn, really) people that this wasn't a complete story? You care that little about your own story?

I hope you have a sequel!

I fucking loved it! Great start,I hope there will be more!

I hope you will continue this tender and loving story between 2 siblings.

A night like this can help to cure a difficult time.

This is one hot story ! You know how to write well and bring the suspense and story line along but not rush it. Your descriptive words and details are great. Yes, we need another chapter or two at least; as it was so hot during the sexy details and the hot hard sex. Hopefully, his sister will want them to move in together and screw etc. She can teach him more and she wants his cum all the time hopefully. Some details about their physical make up would be great and long with more details from his hot and horny sister about what she wants him to do to her. Thank you.

My younger sis and I did very similar after I set up an overnight camping tent in the backyard one summer night. When she saw my big morning erection bulge, she playfully asked if she could see my big cock. She was looking hot in her summer nighty, which made me throb even more. She was mortified at the sight of my thick throbbed, saying, "It's so f***n big and thick!, and the head is massive!" We fondled each other. I fingered her to orgasm, while she jacked and sucked me off. She was in awe at how much jizz I spewed all over her sexy creamy thighs and p*ssy bush.

You said she was a wonderful sister and they got on really well. Why call the title Bratty sister.

If she was petite how did she have curves? Petite means tiny.

Too many discrepancies loses readibility.

I loved this camping story, m as kese want to.go.camping.

This is a well written story. The prose is sure and sometimes playful. The sex scene is well rendered. Good job!

Fairly well written, but was there no hesitation at all between these siblings to get incestuous?

(Being.'petite' and also have 'massive breasts/rack' has already been pointed to.)

Really hot story, can’t wait to read more about these characters something that got me thinking was how old are his older brothers if his sister is eight years older, how old were they when the miracle/oops baby was conceived? Wondering if there is a story there too.

Well done, very hot!

-Schwingprose

5 stars.... ignore the assholes who consider themselves top of the line editors... If they are so smart why aren't they writing... the story was good... I wasn't studying the wording or the plot... I just liked the way it all went down... No pun intended.....

I feel like she just jumped into it too quickly. No hesitation between them as another said. No tension.

Countless petite women have large breasts. In fact, I married one.

Think Danni Ashe, Lorna Morgan, Autumn Jade, Brittney White...the examples are endless. Indeed, I imagined a younger version of Danni as the sister in this story.

Yeah, yeah; some plotting, pacing and stylistic tweaks needed, maybe. But so what? I enjoyed it, and I hope you write more.

The loving brother-sister relationship is the commonest form of incest, and it occurs far more than most people realise. I could see these two becoming a couple; possibly even parents.

Write on!

That was at least a 10 star story.

Olin Teijan kanssa teltassa ja samassa makuupussissa. Nussimme kiimassa paljaalla. Laukesin siskon pilluun.

wish there had been a chapter 2

I really enjoyed it! Well written, good grammar, and fine editing. All three made for a good story. Now, do you write the next chapters or leave it as is? This is a hard one. Though no one cares what I think, I'd like to know what happens when they get home, especially when he finds out she lied, and is PG. Mom and Dad think it's her ex's, but is it!

Excellent and it even had a really good ending.

Oh, Carol!

The Chuck Berry song comes to mind....

But a nice passionate sex ride although no mention of how taboo the sex was....

5 Stars