Nice story indeed. One moment I thought you were going for large sizes : actually, considering the relatively slow (and nice!) pace of your story, I think this could have been a very good introduction to a whole fisting scene....
Well at least I said it, you may go further with a CH.2. Now you're the one who decide! :)
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Anonymous01/07/06
wonderful
Great pace. Good characterization.
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Anonymous11/14/07
Not too bad....
This isn't bad at all, but I just find 2nd person so confusing that it is hard to get into the story.
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Nice story indeed. One moment I thought you were going for large sizes : actually, considering the relatively slow (and nice!) pace of your story, I think this could have been a very good introduction to a whole fisting scene....
Well at least I said it, you may go further with a CH.2. Now you're the one who decide! :)
wonderful
Great pace. Good characterization.
Not too bad....
This isn't bad at all, but I just find 2nd person so confusing that it is hard to get into the story.
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