All Comments on 'Reclining Nude Remix'

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tazz317tazz317over 5 years ago
UNPROTECTED AS IT SEEMS

good friends do not require umbrellas. TK U MLJ LV NV

JonasRobinsonJonasRobinsonover 5 years ago
Beautiful.

Very enchanting and with a ravishing feel to it. I felt springs of purity fall through my nerves.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
no green tea?

paint on dear poet

EllenMoreEllenMoreover 5 years ago
This is a very complex poem, Though it doesn't seem to be.

But look at the structure: the rhyme pattern (aaa baba aaa, some slant), the rhythmic structure (four and three stress lines, accentual rather than accentual syllabic), the use of alliteration (look at all the "S" sounds in the first stanza), the odd use of "whilst" (British English, at least in my experience).

I might object to "jounces" instead of a more painterly verb, and the last line seems a little too clinical (perhaps it is my age, but it brings to mind Masters and Johnson's "optically correct penis" camera). I think that is a minor fault, though.

And you've left off the accent acute on "PĂ©rignon."

But this is a poem that is not only way, way better than the usual Literotica offering, it IS a poem.

Five stars, of course. Ben fatto!

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