All Comments on 'The Perfect Pairing'

by shivadancer

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
????????????

NOW What?

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Where's the story?

Or an ending? This felt like group sex - NOT LW. Badly and weirdly done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Not impressed

Were you trying to impress us with your vocabulary. Try writing like you would talk not with a bunch of $10 words that don't mean anything without a story line.

oldbearswitcholdbearswitchover 5 years ago
Setting an opulent room does nothing to improve the sex scene Lithe or (non standard) lythe has an e at the end

I suppose this was a really hot fantasy for you, since you wrote it. I am equally sure some are going to like it a lot.

Just too much wrapper and not enough candy for the mood Im in tonight. Sorry.

northstanderrhinonorthstanderrhinoover 5 years ago
Extremely Verbose

Have you swallowed a dictionary by any chance? No storyline, no drama not particularly interesting.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Alright!

Keep it up! Story tellers improve over time, and I see your power is growing. Keep writing (and ignore the anonymous complaints)!

DOUG out

26thNC26thNCalmost 5 years ago
OldBear

Said it all in his.comment. I don't even know most of them words.

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