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Furthest thing from a real man there is
Cuckolds have more balls than this guy.
Some didnt like my comment in chapter 1 that throwing your life away over someone who doesnt love you is stupid, but it is. Killing yourself is stupid and killing someone else because of someone who doesnt love you is stupid.
Im not a pacifist by any stretch of the imagination. I would use any amount of force or violence necessary to protect or avenge someone I love but this is as far from that as you can get. He killed over someone who didnt love him (or was mentally unstable if you believe this chapter).
As the bullet said, its not because he loved so deeply - its because he derived his own self worth from others. Im not saying that this can/does never happen because Im sure it does. I also feel kinda bad for the guy who let one person who wasnt worth the time of day end his life but he definately wasnt being macho or manly. He was a coward (even before part 2 he a coward).
Still an OK story even if it was about 2 mental people and 1 asshole - life's like that sometimes. Not the kinda of stuff I like to see in fiction but it probably happens more often than I would care to admit.
Congratulations!
I'm glad I left my comments until Ch2.
You did really well with this story. Disregard the psuedo psychological claptrap from the clueless dissenters.
Make sure you write more of these stories, thet are far better tha the normal wimp shit on literotica.
Joe, how average can a man get?
Could a man be lower than you?
I previously had a great deal of respect for you and your opinions, even when we differed.
Now, after that ill informed and stupid post below you deserve nothing but scorn.
Most people who get near to or commit suicide have more courage in their little finger than your tiny, narrow mind could possibly imagine.
You are sitting there alive and pontificating over something about which you have absolutely no clue whatever.
Brave, brave Joe - sitting at his keyboard pointing his slimy finger at people he knows nothing about.
Brave, brave Joe sitting in judgement over people with more value in their arsehole than Joe's whole existence is worth.
Judge people you know something about Joe.
But, on subjects of which you are so obviously ignorant, shut the fuck up!
That was kinda harsh kanga
I didnt really sit in judgement of anyone. Its a fiction story and I said the character took the easy way out. Why not have the guy get over his distress and live happily ever after?
As I said before, I didnt judge anymore than we all do in every story and I also left a qualifier that it does happen irl and I felt bad that the guy killed himself.
I didnt mean for anyone to take it personally and Im sorry if it struck a nerve with you but I dont think I really deserved this kind of attack for stating my abstract opinion about the actions of fictional character.
Great job Charleybear
Wonderful example of a woman who eventually 'got it'! She eventually figured it out - what she did, what she lost, and now, the worst realisation of all, what it has cost her.
There is no punishment he could have dished out to her if he was alive that can compare with what she is doing to herself. Brilliant writing.
My good friend Kanga put average joe's comments in perspective.
It's way too easy to call someone a coward without standing in their shoes. In reality that sort of comment aptly demonstrates the cowardice of those making them.
Joe, it is so obvious you have never been anywhere near where this character went, otherwise you would never sprout the shit you and bullet are sprouting.
My harshness has been mentioned previously...
And, no I have never been there - thank God, because I don't know what I would do in that situation.
It's like the cheating thing. I have no idea what I would do given the opportunity. I hope I would resist, but who knows?
BUT, I have spent 34 years making bloody sure I have never been in the situation where that decision was necessary.
This was an awesome read.
This wasn't the way I thought he would go. She is only 33 or 34 years old. that is enought for her to recover and continus her life. He should have killed her then turned the ggun on himself. That way the only person injuried would be Marty's wife, whom we haven't heard from
This was an awesome read.
This wasn't the way I thought he would go. She is only 33 or 34 years old. that is enought for her to recover and continus her life. He should have killed her then turned the ggun on himself. That way the only person injuried would be Marty's wife, whom we haven't heard from
This was an awesome read.
This wasn't the way I thought he would go. She is only 33 or 34 years old. that is enought for her to recover and continus her life. He should have killed her then turned the ggun on himself. That way the only person injuried would be Marty's wife, whom we haven't heard from
Choices
This was a very powerful story. What goes on in the minds of people who are pushed too far? We can only conjecture that, because almost every one of them is dead and usually by their own hands.
Emotions and self worth, we become that to which we aspire. We want to be a couple we join up with whom we think is the perfect partner live a few weeks, years or even decades with before we find out that they are only human and make human mistakes or choices that destroy the union.
Just like the employee who goes postal after being fired (whoops – down sized) or reprimanded by a senior in the organization, comes back and shoots up the place killing and wounding fellow employees who had nothing to do with anything except that they are still working there. Close personal unions create the same if not more of a bond and when that bond is broken the results are far more reaching and sometimes more violent. Why the extreme violence against the supposed friend and then himself and not the wife is a question that I see being debated here for a long time.
In the end we have at the minimum three lives destroyed by the acts of these three people. We also have the families of Marty, Paul and Janet. We have all the friends of these three who are also affected by these actions. If Marty and his wife had children they would also be affected. Ripples going out all over, where does it end? A simple act of sex between two people; has created such carnage within the community at large. Choices; folks that’s all that we have. We are responsible for the choices we make, nobody else just us.
George
Sorry people, but Joe's pretty close to the truth
I thought the story was pretty upsetting. And yes, these things do happen in real life. But no, murder/suicide is NOT an act of heroism.
My wife's whole immediate family was taken from her in this way. My wife was 500 miles from the event, or she might have been taken too. I don't know of one person of her family/friends who admires the murderer for his bravery. Everyone I know thinks the son of a bitch was a coward.
Kanga, you don't know shit about this subject. I suggest you keep your opinions to things you really know about. Joe gave a very reasoned response and you attacked him as if he were an axe murderer. I'm not trying to pick a fight with you, Kanga, but I thought you were unreasonable in this instance.
This story is not about a brave man. It's about a weak man who can't handle the humiliation dealt to him by his unfaithful wife. Again, his self-worth is misplaced. It was tied to this woman rather than rooted within himself.
As I said in an earlier post, I've been on that side of it too. I was sincerely and truly in love with my wife and she fucked me over royally and very publicly. Yes, I thought of ringing her neck, but killing myself never crossed my mind. I kind of like myself. I divorced the bitch and got on with my life.
Good Story
He reacted the way he did because his world has been destroyed. Maybe its not right to depend on someone that much, but he did. If she had died in an accident he probably could have gotten over it and went on with his life. That didn't happen, instead she destroyed his life so she could have a good time. He love her too much to kill her, so he killed the man who helped her destroy him, and then took his physical life, because his spirit was dead. The person he considered his soul mate, his alter ego, his very reason for being, had betrayed him. She did not love him. He still loved her to much to live without her. What else (in his mind) does he have to live for?
Well bullet
Try at least to comment on what I actually said, don't rant about a murder/suicide that was close to you and connect me with it.
My complaint was about the comment that suicide is a cowards way.
Did my comment commend suicide? No.
Did my comment suggest it as an option? No.
Did my post mention anything about heroism? No.
I did mention courage. I know people who display more courage than you can imagine, just by getting out of bed of a morning. Nothing to do with heroism.
Argue your point, but don't put words into my mouth so you can then berate me for them.
And you are correct about one thing - I don't know shit about suicide, BUT I do know a few facts, and that's far better than knowing shit.
Your ignorance concerning suicide is obvious from your comments.
Almost everyone has thought about ending it
I have. Friends of mine have and talked to me about it.
Ive seen the effects left behind by those taking their own lives too. Thats the main reason I no longer consider it an option other than in very short passing flights of fancy.
One of my best friends killed himself in highschool. Another very close friend (his brother was my best friend and I spent lots of time at their place and really like their mom) killed himself a couple years out of highschool. The son of a good friend of the family killed himself. A semi-friend (not someone I socialized with much outside of group situations but who I spent a lot of time with in school and at work) found his father after he had killed himself with a shotgun. I know others as well but these were the closest to me. I feel bad for those that kill themselves and I know their lives must really suck to take such a drastic step. Who I really, really feel bad for are the people left behind though. In most cases they end up living through more pain, and for a longer time, than those who commit suicide and leave their loved ones to suffer.
As I said before, I am sorry for those of you who have a personal connection with the issue and I didnt mean anything personal by it. I love people and know that they love me though so I cant imagine myself ever doing that to them no matter how much Im hurting emotionally. I might as well shoot my mother first if I did ever decide to kill myself because it would hurt her less. I hurt worse when I cant help people I love than I do for myself in most situations and I think killing myself would hurt the people I love more than me. If I would cut off my own arm to spare someone I love pain, how could I ever kill myself when I know it would hurt them?
Maybe you are right that I cant know what its like until Im there but who can? All any of us can know is what its like to be left behind. I know it sucks and while I do feel bad for the people I know who have killed themselves, I feel worse for the people who loved them. Just my opinion and I could be wrong.
I also think its an extreme way to get revenge in a fictional story. Maybe it is the best (as in most effective) way to hurt someone who loves you (see above) but he didnt think she loved him in this story. She fucked him over for months and he killed himself because HE couldnt take it. It wasnt to hurt his wife. He couldnt have known she would have even cared given her actions. Besides, I think living well is the best revenge (especially in fiction where its easier than real life).
Kanga: WTF are you upset about?
Kanga, you wrote to me: Your ignorance concerning suicide is obvious from your comments.
Why would you say something so ignorant? Are you just a cruel person by nature or are you just a hot head?
I've had four people very close to me die horribly through this reprehensible act. I am a suicide survivor. My wife suffers from post-traumatic stress syndrome. She has nightmares. she can't work. I spend a significant portion of my time trying to make her feel calm and safe.
When you deal with a topic as emotionally charged as this one, Kanga, perhaps you should think before you write.
Joe Avg said that suicide is a coward's way out. In most cases he is absolutely correct. The brave person finds a way to continue living in the face of whatever pain he/she is suffering.
In reference to this story, of course the man was either a coward or he went insane. His intent was to get revenge for this insult, this humiliation. His intent was to make his wife feel bad. Guess what. It worked. This makes him brave?
Very good story of what could happen in life!!!!
I enjoyed this story. It gave a very real possibilty of how a man could react. It is a tail as old as man, You could go clear back to a caveman , he would fight to protect his females or even his "right to them". Right or wrong it is a fact of nature. When a new lion takes over the pride he kills all the off spring of the past leader. As far as the bickering going on between the other "authors" !CAN IT!!. The rest of us could fucking careless about what you think of each other. Post your thoughts on this story,then attack each other somewhere else.
Chaleybear keep writing these good emotion rizing stories.
Anyone that doesn't like what I have said e-mail me. I am easy to find.
Boys, girl-take it to another playground!
Cut each other up on another venue. Keep it off public comments.
Charleybear:having been through a wife's betrayal, I can see where this guy would want to punish the guy she cheated with. I can also see where he couldn't kill her. He loved her so much even though she stabbed him through the heart. There was only one way he could see to escape the pain and anguish he was experiencing. He chose the only way out that he could think of in his agony. But, that is the way of suicides, in most cases, other people don't know the reason for their deaths.
Vociferous Applause
C-Bear congratulations
You did what in my opinion an author is suppose to do. Get an emotional and cognitive reaction from your reader. Here was a man that loved to deeply and when he found out that his wife was less than what she should have been crumbled from the realization and the pressure. In some ways I rate him just as much of a coward as many of the punk ass cuckholds that you read about in these stories. What put the cuck slightly ahead is that he still has a chance to change. Paul destroyed three lives and forever injured those that remain. Kanga yes your arse was over the top on this one. I say that as one who has been on one dark occasion the person ready to kill and one who has on more than one occasion had to try to minister to the pain of those who remained after the cowardly SOBs killed their supposed loved ones (and others)and then killed themselves. Paul was the protagonist in the story but his last actions were those of one who tucked his tie inside his shirt. Again good job Charleybear
Read ya later
Bishop
Everyone loses big time!
As soon as I read that Paul killed himself I was sure she would be deeply sorry of the fact that she got Marty killed, when she found out. Marty got himself killed but if she had said a simple "No" it would ALL have been avoided.
To me, A very sad story.
Suicide
Self Preservation is the strongest emotion a person has.
I think anyone that commits suicide is mentally ill. In this case her fucking Marty has driven him out of his mind. There is no coward or hero; just someone who's mind has been warped.
Liked the story, but the ending
was a bit over the top.
I think you are right about the suicide business nightowl so lets wait and see if we get dumped on like my countryman kanga for saying it.
Or are we too low profile for the biggies?
"WOW.....Stories should provoke emotions"
but...this one seems to have hit the motherload.
C.B. Congratulations....very thought provoking!
I agree with others, I realize this is emotional, however the personal attacks are unwarranted. I personally love the public comment area almost if not more than the stories. (my bad...lol)
We each have our own little meter inside us that we adjust to our own belief of right and wrong. That is why there is such a debate on assisted suicide. Some who consider Paul a coward, do you also consider people who are suffering from a debilitating physical condition a coward for not suffering for the benefit of family and friends? Can I compare the pain Paul is feeling to someone who is suffering and wants to end the pain? I personally cannot.
Or...how about an easier one? A soldier who dives on a hand gernade and saves his friends. Despite the fact that his wife and children want and need him home and with them, we call him a hero. It is still suicide by choice. Are these families hurting any less than Pauls family will be? Everyone has their own opinion. I am making no judgements of anyone, I have my own meter and it gets adjusted with each situation. All we can do is try and respect others views even if we cannot understand or agree. I shudder to think that it would be up to me to set the standards for other people to live or die by. I have a hard enough time justifying things to myself and I do not have the wisdom of Solomon.
The comments about Janet's motivations not being believable. I think they fit perfectly. We justify things in our own minds. I know many people that use far less justification for their choices. I have to ask myself, is there ever a good reason to cheat or betray? In my own mind there is not, so her telling herself that its his fault because he allowed it, is as good of example as any and better than most. That said.....I respect others view that her reasons were not good enough.(wide grin)
I think that Goodwifey hit it best...the story is more about Janet, than Paul or Marty. Its about someone who finally understands what she has done and the consequences of actions.
Charleybear: excellent story and looking forward to your next.
thanks for the entertainment author and commenters
Gus
oh wow....
I was wondering where you was going to take this.
wow
This HAS to be one of the most purely emotionally charged story that I read here.
The way Paul acted when he found out that his wife had an affair was totally realistic. I know this personally becouse a good friend of mine lived through the first half (fortunately the other man did live).
As for his commiting suicide, I really don't think his mind was too rational then. It's the worse insanity, apearing totally normal but doing totally irrational things.
Could he have gone on? oh yeah we all know he could have, but AT THAT MOMENT did he?
Now I agree with Joe-Avg on the fact that he probally did't think she loved him, how was he to know that she had ended the affair? That she was going to try to 'fix' things?
Now onto the wife.... and I have two very closely related points on this selfish, self-centered, bitch...
Ok 1st she started the affair over a small fight, almost like she was LOOKING for a reason to have one. Yes she told herself a lie...but it wasn't a lie that Paul didn't care...it was a lie that she loved him...how do it know? Point 2.
ok you know that your husband and you are having a problem. You are having an affair. You try to stop it. It CANT be stopped over the phone?
What part of 'I'm sorry but I made a mistake, I need to try and be a good wife and try to save my marrage before my husband finds out about us.' has to be said in person?
AND THEN she has sex again with this man? After now TRUELY KNOWING that it was wrong? How much more selfish are you?
'oh but she had great sex with him and had feelings for him'. that is the only arguement besides she's a selfish bitch that I can figure out and it's well in the words of Kanga40 I believe...BULLSHIT!
My last gf before my wife was great in bed, and I was going to ask her to marry me right before the break up. But when faced with the temptaion to get back with her 'one last time' when I had just gone out with my future spouse just one time I turned it down...why? I knew it was wrong. and the wife should have too. Her marrage was on the rocks but she just HAD to have 'one last fling' before ending it?
Charleybear, here lately there have been several really good stories that have come out that 'sturred up the hornet's nest', this is another one of those. Why? Because you have affected us all emotionally, with an emotionally charged subject. personally I can only think of one other tale here, though I can be wrong, where suicide was used for the affair and the remarks on it where charged as well.
Thank you for not only giving us a very well written tale, but for also for having the pure and plan bravery and nerve to give it to us. I might not agree with the actions of the characters but I understand some of the pain and feelings.
Thank you.
Good story CB
I give you the higest rating I could....I loved the story and the aftermath as well. The story waw well laid out and told. After reading some of the comments, ie.Kanga40 and Ave_joe..I have this to say...Of all the unmitigated bull shit that I have ever read those top it all...these comments sections are meant to encourage the authors of the stories we all are so priviledged to read...not a Forum
for you bleeding ass liberals to get on a soap box to preach your crap to the rest of us....so if you don't have anything good to say...then skip it and go on to read something else....OLD REB
A Well told , but a sad tale
Charleybear: You are a fine author and a great storyteller. I do have to tell you that this was indeed a dark tale. My God, the emotions were tremendous. If you are the cuckhold, what are your options. To the typical cheating slut wife, who could care less until she has to put on the performance of her life as a result of her own misconduct. My regret was that he didn't take his gun and blow her cunt and reproductive organs all to hell before he took his life, That would have been much more fitting
Great Job on a realistic read!
This site needs more of this kind of writing! I am sick and bored to tears with the wimp husband, slut wife, creampie eating demented humiliation crap that is so invasive in this category. It is nice to read a story that is real with real consequences! And there are consequences for cheating in real life. I can't think of anything more un-erotic than cheating, backstabbing, lieing personal devastating betrayl
that it is! I don't know what to say that has not been said. But I do want to say did I agree with what he did? No! But I do understand his emotions! Is she going to be affected for the rest of her life if she can stand it? Hell yes!He did what he intended! Was it right? No! But most of us will never stand in his shoes! I do feel for us readers who have.
Good thought provoking story that is more real to life than we all will ever know.
Thanks for writing!
Sexmate
Excellent story
I'm not sure I like the husband's being depicted as so utterly without resources outside his marriage. At the same time, as a story, it emphasized what the woman had done to him.
Scribe36
excellent continuation
Please don't let the liberal AH's get you down. It is a good story line. I enjoyed it.
WOW
Well written very emotional story. I could go into detail about the hows and why this happened. Bottom line is she cheated on a man wh loved her more than life, sure their was a lot of thing she ment to do to get things back on track, but she didn't talk to him. In the end I am sure he felt he lot everything, everything worth living for. And now when it is too late she feels the same way... The one main true fact is cheated never win but neither dose the spouse or kids when this happens
Hit too close to home for me.......
Oh man, this sucks. Something similar happened to a very close family member of mine. He took almost the same road. Even though this happened many years ago, I would give anything if he would have stayed calm and think things through. Although I do not like the outcome of the story, there is a valuable lesson behind it. Never take actions when you are emotionaly unstable.
I still remember that incident up to this day. I guess the ripple still affects me. Oh well... :(
I liked it.......
While I am not a suicidal type person, I can see why a person
might decide this world is not where they want to be.
Most of you won't agree with me, and I would not have agreed
with myself five years ago, but I have watched my parents and my in-laws leave this world...in pain from strokes, cancer, heart attacks, Alzheimers and so on. I was sad for me and happy for them. One person's opinion, but death is not always your enemy.
This woman has screwed up her life. Now, some of you will say suicide is a permanent solution for a temporary problem
and you will be somewhat correct. But who are we to say
they should not end it? Other than my religious convictions
I am not sure what I would do in her place. I have never
destroyed my life and those I love like she did.
I can see why she is looking at suicide. Can you?
congratulations
A hell of a tale great writing and a great story line. i have added one more writer to my farovites list. you are in very good company. (Patricia51, KK, troubador, charley ace,jakewho69, Xbishop-damn it man write something i miss you,papatoad, aussie bard, rpsuch, harddaysknight and others.
Great story of regret
I loved both chapters and understand both the husband and wife torments. He because she was cheating and wouldn,t level with him. To read how he was crying as he was taking pictures of her exiting Marty's house, you could all most know something was going to happen, because Paul had said early he was the kind of person who met things head on. The wife in her side of the events, mentioned that she used this last visit to Marty to end their relationship. She was then confronted with Paul again and was confronted with the photos. I thought he was going to kill her. I think her leaving Marty's, she now probably planned to devoted herself to Paul, but when Paul killed himself in front of her shebecame deranged. I also guessed through all this she may have found out that Paul had been killed. Having no one to communicated with she now finds herself somewhat drowning in her sorrows. This was a magnificent story and I loved it.
Great Story
The story was very good. She deserved a lot more punishment then what she received.
good story but......
never could understand suicide as a form of retribution or revenge. worse than hitting yourself with a baseball bat but your not around anymore to see if anybody cared.
i can understand how a confrontation can get kind of confusing,husband losing emotion control,wife tongue tied in fear in this one.but suicide is so extreme how can it not give a person pause to get a grip,even a small one.
can't remember by who (Sinatra?) or exact words but the adage 'the best revenge is massive success' seems a who lot more appealing than suicide.
hope i didn't make too many of you (you know who you are!)angry with my comments.this is a suicidal and murderous crowd gathered here!
kudos to you charleybear on a great story. getting many responses as you did is always a positive, even if their negative! LOL
don
See! Guns don't kill people.....
Marines kill people, and then themselves!
my alternate ending
this is great writing, riveting, I only wish he had shot the guys balls off instead, and left it at that. Then again, it is easy coming up with alternate endings, charleybear did all the hard work. Great story!
Jagger,
It has NOTHING to do with revenge. It means he felt his life was killed and he performed the ritual. He felt there was nothing to try to live FOR.
She knows she killed him though
Gun con trol
The guy is portrayed as a cold blooded murderer. Presumably he bought the bullets at a time when he had no particular need for them but with the clear intention of using them; there isn't any other reason to buy bullets. There is a suggestion in the story that he might have a violent temperament; all the more reason for not putting temptation in his own way by buying not only a gun but lethal ammunition.
OK! Marty had fucked his wife but can hardly be blamed for that if she drives to his place to get it. He had pissed his wife off; she had decided she preferred a new guy and gone freely to his bed. Not nice but not an adequate excuse for murder; not there ever is one anyway; if anyone were to be murdered the wife seems most appropriate.
As with other of CB's stories the nasty tale is well told.
get help
Murder is never an option, but this is fiction, so what the hell. I have read two of this author's stories and they have suicide and murder. I think I have read enough.
Murderers never win either
Here's a double goose egg for a revolting story. The hubby kills someone over a piece of ass? Then wimps out and takes the coward's way out by blowing his brains out? What a loser he is. That must've been the greatest piece of tail ever if it makes men die for it.
Hate suicide, but great story
I think that killing herself is the only option left open for her. Stupid slut was just wasting our oxygen anyway.
i think she is doing the right thing
she will never be right again... and what about martys wife she will blame her also ....only right she ends her pain thesame way she killed two men ...thats right she murdered two men ...and how can you ever live with killing your own hubby ...will be bette to die
Isadora Duncan Riiiii-iiides Again!
THIS IS how some of these stories actually end. I gotta tell ya folks, that it isn't at all unusual to see multiple suicides and/or homicides in these types of triangles. A VERY conflicted woman becomes conflicted with the love life she leads. She doesn't have to feel so very suicidal, but she feels so very guilty at the incredible loss, that she doesn't realize what a ruthless act the homicide and suicide was, and she should be ANGRY NOW at her dead husband. In one fell stroke he has destroyed four lives!
Dickwad Marty's wife was also in this, no? And she wasn't even mentioned here! Did Marty have any children? For a guy who "got around" as much as he did, I would imagine that he had a few tucked away here or there, no?
How was Marty's wife (If any) doing at this point? And how about all the friends and relatives? No, it cannot be ignored; The suicide was the most selfish thing that could be done by way of harming anyone.
But wait; There's more!
What about the husband's mom and dad? If they are still alive, then they will go to their graves KNOWING that they bore and bred a murderer/cuckold. And, that they were gonna have to bear this for the rest of their sad, sad lives. I have knowna few such people in my life. And we watched one dad kill HIMself over the situation, and that left HIS wife alone for an eternity.
In SOME cases in life, there are NO WINNERS. This was One Such Episode.
good story
its not murder , its justice. its not suicide its psychological warfare.
Gun Control?
Idiot comments, some of these comments really torque my jaw. We have a guy that has lost "his rock", temporary insanity or just deep depression. Marvelous comments folks, empathize with the pain shown, if you haven't been there you probably can't imagine the pain. Then to take cheap shots at him using a gun and being a Marine. If he'd beat the man to death you'd have faulted him for his brutality. If he'd just left, you'd have called him a wimp. You can never please all the people all the time.
Author, I thought you did a good job in a short story of bringing out the feelings of the people involved, and their emotions. After killing the guy, he had nothing to look forward to but prison. The wife had one last time, rather than break it off after she 'realized' what she'd done. Cheating is a sign of mental illness as far as I'm concerned let her pay whatever way she desires. Thanks for sharing!
drastic ending
sad story. strong story. Sad and drastic ending. He could have shown more strength. It seems just an easy way out but if your world as you know it falls apart around you, some people react differently. Personally, I would retract to indifference and try to move on, or at least I think I would, after exposing the cheaters to extract revenge on them. But that's just me. His suicide seems so vain.G.Belgium.
Awh
This is probable but she seems to weak for it. She felt for that asshole so her moral and ethic backbone is probably not strong enough. Also she is a woman in childbearing age geared for life, so, I don't think so but I've been known to be wrong a couple of times :) so who knows.. If she does it I can understand her... I would call It survivors guilt, but at least one of them should live. It's a pity you didn't make her pregnant because then she would have had something to live for more than memories... Ah well, it's life... Cheers Yoron.
LW story as modern day Greek tragedy...
A staple CB LW story - dark intense and extreme with it's conceqences (too extreme for me in this particular case). But, as always, a great read as a human drama, or better yet - in CB's stories, they are read more like Greek tragedies...
no pity for her
seems justifiable to me. unfortunate that he could just leave the source of his angst, going onto something/anything better.
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