Seems to me you captured a very important aspect of relationship in eros. Mutual benefit, combined with an uncompromising regard for one' s partner and a liberal sprinkling of mutual respect shines throughout this work. The sexual tensions are not diminished by the reality of mutual cooperation towards a shared end. Perhaps it paints to rosy a conclusion, but only if eros is perceived in a narrowly construed fashion, without regard for its emotional efficacy and power for meaningful change.
Keep writing and using your gifts.
This is the first story I can remember reading from a male point of view where I didn't think the guy was all about himself. I really liked this narrator as he shared his story about this lost woman and how over time he fell in love with her. By far a wonderful love story.
Excellent! I loved the way you gave both main characters equal support.It was a very good read and very entertaining. I will check out what else you have written,so keep up the good work.
The author gave us some views on moral behavior and chivalry. I was expecting the main character to take advantage of the situation in the beginning when the poor young lady offered herself to him and he refused to indulge on high moral grounds. This was a remarkable enlightenment that set the tone. He further had deep seeded sexual desires and again held back until he felt the young lady was meeting him in a mutual assent to a relationship with sexual relations which is quite IRONIC for the site as a whole. I not offering this as a criticism but more as an observation. The story built slow and there were fears from this readers point of view that this young lady might be seduced by one of the clients or towards the end where she was offered a change of venue and great paying job and blew it off. The ending or outcome was fantastic. This story has great sequel potential. Thanks to the author for a well developed genuine Knight in shining armour love story. CHIVALRY LIVES
This deserves at lest 10 stars.
Any chance of a chapter two???
by
Anonymous01/14/13
Touching
A really original story with no pretensions. Loved the way it was carried forward. Mutual admiration and understanding was the crux of the story. I really liked it. Thanks a lot.
It seems like that the more stories I read here, the more tremendously good authors I come across. I favorite an author and read a couple of his and then randomly pick one off the Similar Stories corner because of an interesting title. I find I picked up on another awesome writer and so on. My favorite author list is getting rather large. Not a complaint. Just an observation that there is a lot of talent here.
by
Anonymous03/27/13
better late than never
I read this some time ago, when I didn't have time to say what I thought. I made that
time today, and I must say this is one of the 4, maybe 5 best stories I have read here.
In today's cynical and increasingly unethical world, you wrote an Horatio Alger-type story and did it so well those of use who liked it (and I presume others think as I
do) were handed an excellently written, "feel-good but not treacly' STORY". It had some character development, probably all you could do in the length it was; it had
credible plot (as long as the reader is capable of believing that people like Phil still exist (they do but they're difficult to portray in fiction because they are rejected
as saps and naive and dumb), when all they really are is hard-working, successful folk,sharp at evaluating people with no personal need to cut them open to find faults, and smart
in the way people with sense can be. We used to call them decent, caring human beings - they are so hard to find that in my eyes, the character you developed could have been a cause of failure - no one would believe there was such a person.
I notice one reviewer faulted you for "not developing the Holly character". I couldn't disagree more; without the tension of him ensuring she was moving ahead in a way
he thought could work and a way where, if there were surprises, they'd be good surprises, absent that tension, the story loses vitality - there is always often unspoken comment in the narrative leading one to wonder "How are Phil and Holly
going to resolve the debt, the incredible support at time of need and STILL have a relationship. The easy ending today is she pays PHil what she owes him, they
sleep together or don't, but either way both waltz off into the sunset alone. You
got through this with a sort of "deus ex machina" in the form of the bosses and her skills. Great job! Good read, good feeling read, one has a hard time putting the story down without a smile on their face and a little bit more hope in their hearts,.
whonoze
It's extremely rare to find a story that displays as much insight into human nature and into the process of establishing a real rapport with customers, as this one does. Very well written. I think meticulous is the adjective I'd use to describe it. Really a masterful job of storytelling. And besides all that, I loved it!
A wonderful well written story, very believable too.
You belong in the same class with romantic1, oldhippie1949, mogplayer and webspinner.
Keep up the great writing...
by
Anonymous05/03/13
awwww
what can I say that others had not elaborated on...this story believably one to re read again and again
there was an earlier comment about a follow up story in Maui...possibility?
In my opinion, a story can be considered to have reached a different level, If it inspires a reader to write his own story. This one belongs to that special category. Simply great!
every time I read this, I get warm inside. you make my heart happy. thank you
by
Anonymous06/07/13
What A Nice Story
A loving story told in a plausible and believable fashion. Someone down to their last option, given a chance to recover, then set free to shine brightly. Thank you for writing such a positive and uplifting story. Really enjoyed Holly 's release from her sexual purgatory and the proposal at the end. Really enjoy your writings!!!
I have read this story before and have enjoyed it very much both times. I loved the wait for sex to become involved and am glad it wasn't ever the focus of the story!
Well done.
The ending gets me every time I read this - even though it's telegraphed all to hell, the tears come without any prompting. This is a truly great story.
by
Anonymous08/06/13
Very entertaining!
Loved this story...
by
Anonymous08/08/13
Yes!!
This is the second story of yours I've read and it's awesome. They both are. I've been in IT for 20 years and been around the block personally and in business so I've experienced a lot of what's in this story. The sweetness of the tale, the characters and th joy of getting it right is all there. A great piece of work. And sexy, too! Thank you!
by
Anonymous08/24/13
Accidental Misvote!
Argh, I feel like an idiot! I accidentally voted on my touch screen and gave this amazing story a single star! Someone tell the site mods to erase my vote, this is definitely a five star story!
I've read this a couple of times. Just reread it again. Great writing and perfectly told. Still enjoy a good romance story. 5*s!! Thanks for the great story.
I gave this story five stars, but damn it, i wish there were more stars i could give. It was beautifully written and managed to sink me into it's world.
ONE OF THE VERY BEST STORIES I HAVE READ IN LITEROTICA AND NARRATED VERY BEAUTIFULLY THE VERY PASSIONATE STORY to the finish. I am short of vocabulary to express my appreciation of the story.
I wish the author all success his/her endeavours to put more such stories on line to LITEROTICA.
... this was a sweet little story. Finally commenting after my 3rd or 4th time reading it.
My contribution to the praise is to appreciate that there were no tear downs of the characters. While Holly was being built up, she did no ripping on Phil - rather, she built him up, as well. That to me was a nice part of the story (although not the only nice part, wink wink, nudge nudge!).
by
Anonymous09/28/13
Awesome
I just read this the first time. I am pretty sure I will read it again. So inspiring.
by
Anonymous10/03/13
YOU done good
great actually *********************'s
by
Anonymous10/04/13
A first for me
I have not before read a story on Lit that has moved me to tears, but I was so emotionally involved with your characters that a tear rolled down my cheek at the end when he proposed. Thanks for a wonderful story. I'm off now to read any more of yours I can locate.
by
Anonymous10/04/13
Holly&Phil
A really nice story.I only wish it had been longer.Keep up the good work.
by
Anonymous10/22/13
Derby & Joan
A first class feel good story :-) Great!
by
Anonymous10/23/13
wow , great story !
great story ! i felt so good after reading this , thanks , u r having great talent.
by
Anonymous10/25/13
Nice......i like it
A nice history..make you wait for more...perfectly balanced
by
Anonymous10/26/13
I pulled my five stars here too...
You're story is great man and try a little more love... Not just sex... some emotional thing's.. ;-)
English
The art of story.
Seems to me you captured a very important aspect of relationship in eros. Mutual benefit, combined with an uncompromising regard for one' s partner and a liberal sprinkling of mutual respect shines throughout this work. The sexual tensions are not diminished by the reality of mutual cooperation towards a shared end. Perhaps it paints to rosy a conclusion, but only if eros is perceived in a narrowly construed fashion, without regard for its emotional efficacy and power for meaningful change.
Keep writing and using your gifts.
Great Story
This is the first story I can remember reading from a male point of view where I didn't think the guy was all about himself. I really liked this narrator as he shared his story about this lost woman and how over time he fell in love with her. By far a wonderful love story.
Loving It
this was a very good story.
5 Stars!!!!
Excellent! I loved the way you gave both main characters equal support.It was a very good read and very entertaining. I will check out what else you have written,so keep up the good work.
great story!!!
The author gave us some views on moral behavior and chivalry. I was expecting the main character to take advantage of the situation in the beginning when the poor young lady offered herself to him and he refused to indulge on high moral grounds. This was a remarkable enlightenment that set the tone. He further had deep seeded sexual desires and again held back until he felt the young lady was meeting him in a mutual assent to a relationship with sexual relations which is quite IRONIC for the site as a whole. I not offering this as a criticism but more as an observation. The story built slow and there were fears from this readers point of view that this young lady might be seduced by one of the clients or towards the end where she was offered a change of venue and great paying job and blew it off. The ending or outcome was fantastic. This story has great sequel potential. Thanks to the author for a well developed genuine Knight in shining armour love story. CHIVALRY LIVES
5 Stars, no way.....
This deserves at lest 10 stars.
Any chance of a chapter two???
Touching
A really original story with no pretensions. Loved the way it was carried forward. Mutual admiration and understanding was the crux of the story. I really liked it. Thanks a lot.
Great Story
One of the best I have read, Keep it up.
General comment
It seems like that the more stories I read here, the more tremendously good authors I come across. I favorite an author and read a couple of his and then randomly pick one off the Similar Stories corner because of an interesting title. I find I picked up on another awesome writer and so on. My favorite author list is getting rather large. Not a complaint. Just an observation that there is a lot of talent here.
better late than never
I read this some time ago, when I didn't have time to say what I thought. I made that
time today, and I must say this is one of the 4, maybe 5 best stories I have read here.
In today's cynical and increasingly unethical world, you wrote an Horatio Alger-type story and did it so well those of use who liked it (and I presume others think as I
do) were handed an excellently written, "feel-good but not treacly' STORY". It had some character development, probably all you could do in the length it was; it had
credible plot (as long as the reader is capable of believing that people like Phil still exist (they do but they're difficult to portray in fiction because they are rejected
as saps and naive and dumb), when all they really are is hard-working, successful folk,sharp at evaluating people with no personal need to cut them open to find faults, and smart
in the way people with sense can be. We used to call them decent, caring human beings - they are so hard to find that in my eyes, the character you developed could have been a cause of failure - no one would believe there was such a person.
I notice one reviewer faulted you for "not developing the Holly character". I couldn't disagree more; without the tension of him ensuring she was moving ahead in a way
he thought could work and a way where, if there were surprises, they'd be good surprises, absent that tension, the story loses vitality - there is always often unspoken comment in the narrative leading one to wonder "How are Phil and Holly
going to resolve the debt, the incredible support at time of need and STILL have a relationship. The easy ending today is she pays PHil what she owes him, they
sleep together or don't, but either way both waltz off into the sunset alone. You
got through this with a sort of "deus ex machina" in the form of the bosses and her skills. Great job! Good read, good feeling read, one has a hard time putting the story down without a smile on their face and a little bit more hope in their hearts,.
whonoze
Very well written!
It's extremely rare to find a story that displays as much insight into human nature and into the process of establishing a real rapport with customers, as this one does. Very well written. I think meticulous is the adjective I'd use to describe it. Really a masterful job of storytelling. And besides all that, I loved it!
Wonderful....
A wonderful well written story, very believable too.
You belong in the same class with romantic1, oldhippie1949, mogplayer and webspinner.
Keep up the great writing...
awwww
what can I say that others had not elaborated on...this story believably one to re read again and again
there was an earlier comment about a follow up story in Maui...possibility?
Inspired
In my opinion, a story can be considered to have reached a different level, If it inspires a reader to write his own story. This one belongs to that special category. Simply great!
Lovely. A sweet, refreshing, satisfying story about two nice, hardworking, ethical people.
Incredible story
Well god damn... amazing.
Bravo.
Great characters, believable emotions, not too sappy and it made me care. Oh, and the sex was inspiring, too.
wonderful
every time I read this, I get warm inside. you make my heart happy. thank you
What A Nice Story
A loving story told in a plausible and believable fashion. Someone down to their last option, given a chance to recover, then set free to shine brightly. Thank you for writing such a positive and uplifting story. Really enjoyed Holly 's release from her sexual purgatory and the proposal at the end. Really enjoy your writings!!!
Very well written! Thank you for sharing this story with us. I have read it twice before. One of my favorites!
Very nice.
Well written, clever concept and enjoyable to read. Great job! Keep at it.
Very touching
This story is very touching and very nice and is also quite well written.
Fantastic and moving
I have read this story before and have enjoyed it very much both times. I loved the wait for sex to become involved and am glad it wasn't ever the focus of the story!
Well done.
Fantastic
Very good story
Dear ,
This is the best story I have read in recent years after I joined in sales .gr8 work
Every time...
The ending gets me every time I read this - even though it's telegraphed all to hell, the tears come without any prompting. This is a truly great story.
Very entertaining!
Loved this story...
Yes!!
This is the second story of yours I've read and it's awesome. They both are. I've been in IT for 20 years and been around the block personally and in business so I've experienced a lot of what's in this story. The sweetness of the tale, the characters and th joy of getting it right is all there. A great piece of work. And sexy, too! Thank you!
Accidental Misvote!
Argh, I feel like an idiot! I accidentally voted on my touch screen and gave this amazing story a single star! Someone tell the site mods to erase my vote, this is definitely a five star story!
Still a Great Story
I've read this a couple of times. Just reread it again. Great writing and perfectly told. Still enjoy a good romance story. 5*s!! Thanks for the great story.
Best story i've read all week
I gave this story five stars, but damn it, i wish there were more stars i could give. It was beautifully written and managed to sink me into it's world.
SALES TEAM
ONE OF THE VERY BEST STORIES I HAVE READ IN LITEROTICA AND NARRATED VERY BEAUTIFULLY THE VERY PASSIONATE STORY to the finish. I am short of vocabulary to express my appreciation of the story.
I wish the author all success his/her endeavours to put more such stories on line to LITEROTICA.
Bast story of my Life
I have No words for this story,...........................
Once Again ...
... this was a sweet little story. Finally commenting after my 3rd or 4th time reading it.
My contribution to the praise is to appreciate that there were no tear downs of the characters. While Holly was being built up, she did no ripping on Phil - rather, she built him up, as well. That to me was a nice part of the story (although not the only nice part, wink wink, nudge nudge!).
Awesome
I just read this the first time. I am pretty sure I will read it again. So inspiring.
YOU done good
great actually *********************'s
A first for me
I have not before read a story on Lit that has moved me to tears, but I was so emotionally involved with your characters that a tear rolled down my cheek at the end when he proposed. Thanks for a wonderful story. I'm off now to read any more of yours I can locate.
Holly&Phil
A really nice story.I only wish it had been longer.Keep up the good work.
Derby & Joan
A first class feel good story :-) Great!
wow , great story !
great story ! i felt so good after reading this , thanks , u r having great talent.
Nice......i like it
A nice history..make you wait for more...perfectly balanced
I pulled my five stars here too...
You're story is great man and try a little more love... Not just sex... some emotional thing's.. ;-)
good story
Great story,
Just curious about the original friend from down the hall and she would come into the story. :-)
0
Well thought through
Great short story, loved reading it
Great
It is really nice to read a well written feel good story. Well done!
5 STARS
Awesome read! Really enjoyed it.
Yes!
That was wonderful!
can't
get much better than this one.
Bl***dy Good in fact, awesome. All about real people....
smashing
I say ol boy, best of bests
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