Good depiction of a loving couple working together as a team. That is what it is all about.
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Anonymous10/26/15
Would love to see another chapter.
This is definitely one of the most well written stories I have seen on this site. Not too short, and not too long, and most importantly... left me wanting more.
Could easily see another chapter in the future, however, as well as it is written, it doesn't really need one. Doesn't mean I don't want one. *Hint Hint*
Really loved this story! ~ However it might have benefited from some more romantic conflict such as another man luring/tempting Holly ,Phil thinking he may have lost her,but her being true to him. (Just my opinion.)
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Anonymous12/10/15
Simply Great Read.
Truly absorbing and enjoyable story, written by an author who excels in the craft.
by
Anonymous12/18/15
wonderful story
The premise of thestory was the best I've read on these pages. But what find very heartening wzs your grammar, not one error that I recall.becauze of thst, I will read you again.
As this is the second story of yours that I've read, I was still surprised at how well it was written AND executed. I've also read 'My Irish Virgin'. Since they both were done so well (spelling, syntax, christ I could go on but I'll stop there), I've made 'Sales Team' a favorite as well as made you a favorite author. If anything was 'wrong' about this story, I'd say that you bordered on corny but you didn't go over the edge, either. So, in conclusion, I'll be back to read more!!!
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Anonymous12/23/15
Erotica vs. Porn
I love the fact that, while noticing and appreciating Holly's physical beauty, Phil was focused on seeing Holly as a total person. You did not waste words telling us her breast size or the size of the Phil's penis but, instead, showed us Holly's insecurities and strengths. I also saw their relationship as a model of what a true loving relationship should be: two people with different personalities and strengths who support and build each other up rather than tear each other down because of their differences. Thank you for understanding the difference between erotica and pornography and choosing to write the former. More, please!
I am not sure if you are still reading these but this is one of my favorite stories and I hope you stopped posting on a free site because you are making money for your work. If you are publishing for cash let me know and I will buy ..... 5 stars
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Anonymous02/16/16
Cat 5
I am going to try some more of your works and hope they are as good.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
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Anonymous02/17/16
Romance Lives!! and always will!
Outstanding!!!!! I have been visiting this site for about twenty years and enjoyed many a story from many different authors. This is the best romantic story that I have read. Not an experience one would necessarily expect to find on a "sex story'" site. Over the fifty-five years of joyful reading that I been blessed to have been immersed in, more than a few romantic stories (including novels) have gratefully crossed my path.
This story ranks up there with the best. A great story line, marvelous characters, thoughtful and engaging development of plot line, what more could be asked from an author. I would certainly hope that the author has (or will) turn a hand to writing professionally (in any genre of personal choice).
N.B. This is my very first comment (on any story in any category for this site).
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Anonymous02/26/16
Best...story...ever
Best story ever! The only caveat I will add to that compliment is that I know it is very possible I will read something better when I go through the rest of your stories!
Not everyone will have a chance to be a hero in someone else's life, glad I could read this accounting. I need to look and see if you have anything new here, good luck topping a wonderful story.
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Anonymous04/13/16
Outstanding read!
Well written with a beautiful story line. Keep writing - you're too good not to!
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Anonymous04/17/16
Excellent in every way!
This is one time that a five star rating just isn't high enough.
by
Anonymous04/26/16
Fabulous story!
Thanks for a real story that took it's time for the people to get to know each other and develop a connection before jumping in the sack. Thanks for a story where Phil was not only putting Holly's needs before his wants, but honest enough to give credit where it was due. A man and a woman whose smarts, honesty, loyalty, caring, and talent are to be admired.
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Anonymous04/27/16
keep going
Think about writing a second on this. Like the sales team trip
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Anonymous05/22/16
WOW
What a great story - keep writing please, you have talent! A continuation of this story would be greatly appreciated.
I wasn't sure I'd like the story at the beginning... Phil seemed pretty darned pushy, and came off 'kinda creepy'. I don't think that a girl who's fallen on hard times, and in a vulnerable albeit desperate situation, would let her guard down around a pushy dude like that. But thankfully, as the story continued, Phil developed a more approachable, human side that seemed more appealing.
I also wondered about Phil's neighbor, and Holly's friend, Carol. In a real-world situation like this, upon her return, Carol would have been quickly included. She'd be looking out for her friend, especially as she felt bad about missing Holly's arrival. Perhaps at the start, Phil could have attempted to reach Carol by phone (as they were 'good friends' - contact information for the impending trip home might have been exchanged), to explain the situation, and in so doing, could tell her not to worry; that Holly was in good hands. That would also have put Holly at ease early on, and perhaps would have provided a better springboard from which to launch the rest of the romance.
Still, I found the story entertaining. 4 stars.
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Anonymous06/08/16
Outstanding!
I've been reading on Literotica for years and this was, hands down, the best I've read. Excellent story, no spelling errors and great grammar! Thank you!
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Anonymous07/04/16
Great
I usually do not like protracted stories but this was a good one. Enjoyed it. Smooth all the way.
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Anonymous07/13/16
Something the wife would like
Something the wife would like!
I think I could print this out and she would read it. She's not much on the sexy part but it's not over-the-top either. It was a really easy to read and stay with.
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Anonymous07/13/16
As a salesman of over 25 years experience in 3 different industries, this touched a chord. Oh! For the chance to find such a harmonious blend of intelligence, ability and sex appeal in a worker/assistant/future wife. True fantasy but great to imagine that
See above (comment)
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Anonymous07/17/16
What a great read.
As a salesman and a romantic this story was awesome. I was a little worried it might some how go wrong at the end. But you brought it together perfectly. Oh how I love a happy ending.
Truly enjoyable reading from beginning to end. So well written, with appealing characters that really come to life. Look forward to reading much more of this author's work.
Most of the business themed writing misses the mark so badly as to be funny. As someone who has lived for forty years on my ability to sell, I can tell you this could happen.
And then it is sexy and erotic as hell. Really appreciate this one.
As a businessman with more than 30 years experience, I can say I Love This Story! Deeply patterned and richly detailed, the characters come to life and develop beautifully! I read this story...5 (?) years ago, and loved it as much then. WELL DONE!
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Anonymous08/24/16
Aren't you glad you didn't pass this one up?
Cat5, this has all the elements that a great story needs! Thanx for an outstanding read.
BDEarth
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Anonymous08/28/16
great story
One of the best story. Hope to read more from You.
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Anonymous09/01/16
3 times now
l've read this 3 times now, it's one of my favorites, up there with "charity begins next door" and Irish Eyes.
English
Amazing
Had tears in my eyes reading the last page. Truly amazing piece of writing! 10 stars for me.
hard pressed
to find a tale better than this one.
Cat5, S W Hermit, Web Spinner are in my" BEST OF BEST" favorite story talers.
Spectacular!
A great story.
AMAZING
Cant have enough of this beautifull and well written story. 5 stars so far.
Chapeau!!!
Outstanding!
I've loved this story from the first moment I read it, hence the reason it's in my favorite's list...great job!
MoogPlayer
Very good story.
Certainly one of the best stories on this site.
Beautiful
Very well written erotica.
One of the best
Good depiction of a loving couple working together as a team. That is what it is all about.
Would love to see another chapter.
This is definitely one of the most well written stories I have seen on this site. Not too short, and not too long, and most importantly... left me wanting more.
Could easily see another chapter in the future, however, as well as it is written, it doesn't really need one. Doesn't mean I don't want one. *Hint Hint*
Great Story!
Really loved this story! ~ However it might have benefited from some more romantic conflict such as another man luring/tempting Holly ,Phil thinking he may have lost her,but her being true to him. (Just my opinion.)
Simply Great Read.
Truly absorbing and enjoyable story, written by an author who excels in the craft.
wonderful story
The premise of thestory was the best I've read on these pages. But what find very heartening wzs your grammar, not one error that I recall.becauze of thst, I will read you again.
Really good story!!
As this is the second story of yours that I've read, I was still surprised at how well it was written AND executed. I've also read 'My Irish Virgin'. Since they both were done so well (spelling, syntax, christ I could go on but I'll stop there), I've made 'Sales Team' a favorite as well as made you a favorite author. If anything was 'wrong' about this story, I'd say that you bordered on corny but you didn't go over the edge, either. So, in conclusion, I'll be back to read more!!!
Erotica vs. Porn
I love the fact that, while noticing and appreciating Holly's physical beauty, Phil was focused on seeing Holly as a total person. You did not waste words telling us her breast size or the size of the Phil's penis but, instead, showed us Holly's insecurities and strengths. I also saw their relationship as a model of what a true loving relationship should be: two people with different personalities and strengths who support and build each other up rather than tear each other down because of their differences. Thank you for understanding the difference between erotica and pornography and choosing to write the former. More, please!
Third reading
This is one very well written, enjoyable, and entertaing story. One of the best on Literotica.
out landishly
outstanding 5 stars
excellent story
One of the best stories I've read for a long time
So Good!
So enjoyable after reading for the second time. Five stars & kudos!
Second read for me.
loved it thank you five stars.
The comments.
I got fed up reading through the comments trying to find a 'bad' one.. I could not find one.
one of the best
I am not sure if you are still reading these but this is one of my favorite stories and I hope you stopped posting on a free site because you are making money for your work. If you are publishing for cash let me know and I will buy ..... 5 stars
Cat 5
I am going to try some more of your works and hope they are as good.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
Romance Lives!! and always will!
Outstanding!!!!! I have been visiting this site for about twenty years and enjoyed many a story from many different authors. This is the best romantic story that I have read. Not an experience one would necessarily expect to find on a "sex story'" site. Over the fifty-five years of joyful reading that I been blessed to have been immersed in, more than a few romantic stories (including novels) have gratefully crossed my path.
This story ranks up there with the best. A great story line, marvelous characters, thoughtful and engaging development of plot line, what more could be asked from an author. I would certainly hope that the author has (or will) turn a hand to writing professionally (in any genre of personal choice).
N.B. This is my very first comment (on any story in any category for this site).
Best...story...ever
Best story ever! The only caveat I will add to that compliment is that I know it is very possible I will read something better when I go through the rest of your stories!
Great Story!
I really enjoyed reading this story. Well written and presented. Thanks.
Second read for me.
Not everyone will have a chance to be a hero in someone else's life, glad I could read this accounting. I need to look and see if you have anything new here, good luck topping a wonderful story.
Outstanding read!
Well written with a beautiful story line. Keep writing - you're too good not to!
Excellent in every way!
This is one time that a five star rating just isn't high enough.
Fabulous story!
Thanks for a real story that took it's time for the people to get to know each other and develop a connection before jumping in the sack. Thanks for a story where Phil was not only putting Holly's needs before his wants, but honest enough to give credit where it was due. A man and a woman whose smarts, honesty, loyalty, caring, and talent are to be admired.
keep going
Think about writing a second on this. Like the sales team trip
WOW
What a great story - keep writing please, you have talent! A continuation of this story would be greatly appreciated.
Fourth or Fifth time through...
.....and I STILL love it !!
The way he looked after her was excellent - that's the way to do it !!
Cat 5 - this is a stunningly good story - maybe your Best ?
Thanks for writing it. 5 Stars ( of course )
Pretty good
I wasn't sure I'd like the story at the beginning... Phil seemed pretty darned pushy, and came off 'kinda creepy'. I don't think that a girl who's fallen on hard times, and in a vulnerable albeit desperate situation, would let her guard down around a pushy dude like that. But thankfully, as the story continued, Phil developed a more approachable, human side that seemed more appealing.
I also wondered about Phil's neighbor, and Holly's friend, Carol. In a real-world situation like this, upon her return, Carol would have been quickly included. She'd be looking out for her friend, especially as she felt bad about missing Holly's arrival. Perhaps at the start, Phil could have attempted to reach Carol by phone (as they were 'good friends' - contact information for the impending trip home might have been exchanged), to explain the situation, and in so doing, could tell her not to worry; that Holly was in good hands. That would also have put Holly at ease early on, and perhaps would have provided a better springboard from which to launch the rest of the romance.
Still, I found the story entertaining. 4 stars.
Outstanding!
I've been reading on Literotica for years and this was, hands down, the best I've read. Excellent story, no spelling errors and great grammar! Thank you!
Great
I usually do not like protracted stories but this was a good one. Enjoyed it. Smooth all the way.
Something the wife would like
Something the wife would like!
I think I could print this out and she would read it. She's not much on the sexy part but it's not over-the-top either. It was a really easy to read and stay with.
As a salesman of over 25 years experience in 3 different industries, this touched a chord. Oh! For the chance to find such a harmonious blend of intelligence, ability and sex appeal in a worker/assistant/future wife. True fantasy but great to imagine that
See above (comment)
What a great read.
As a salesman and a romantic this story was awesome. I was a little worried it might some how go wrong at the end. But you brought it together perfectly. Oh how I love a happy ending.
Well done
Totally enjoyable and sweet. Thank you for this story. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Finally! A Really GREAT Story.
Loved it from the beginning to the ending.
Outstanding Story.
Truly enjoyable reading from beginning to end. So well written, with appealing characters that really come to life. Look forward to reading much more of this author's work.
Third reading
Still one of the very best stories.
real world
Most of the business themed writing misses the mark so badly as to be funny. As someone who has lived for forty years on my ability to sell, I can tell you this could happen.
And then it is sexy and erotic as hell. Really appreciate this one.
Outstanding
The best story I have read on Literotica.
BRILLIANT & BEAUTIFUL!
As a businessman with more than 30 years experience, I can say I Love This Story! Deeply patterned and richly detailed, the characters come to life and develop beautifully! I read this story...5 (?) years ago, and loved it as much then. WELL DONE!
Aren't you glad you didn't pass this one up?
Cat5, this has all the elements that a great story needs! Thanx for an outstanding read.
BDEarth
great story
One of the best story. Hope to read more from You.
3 times now
l've read this 3 times now, it's one of my favorites, up there with "charity begins next door" and Irish Eyes.
Absolutely loved it!!!
AWESOME!
Sure hope you consider a sequel!
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