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idle musings
Thanks for the 2nd installment. Quite a different twist from part 1. The further delving into David's part in the Brotherhood and the background on Alexander. I noticed you didn't include Jeremy very much, and you also had made a quote with David and Anna about how they don't really develop "Brother" friendships. During the first installment, it clearly seemed that Jeremy was both a Mentor and Friend. Was this change in heart done mid-writing?
Idle musings as the title stated. I enjoyed your second installment and appreciate the hard work that you have put into this creation.
Thanks for sharing,
SM
Damn you're good.....
Look forward to your future chapters. Very complex story lines, characters with character, the proverbial book that you can't put down once you start reading it.
Excellent continuation
Very good second part. David's background and the Brotherhood's plan for him are very interesting and I would like to see more. My only point of concern is David's relapse to his army days. The dialogue seems force when describing the throwing knives to relax and the master chief's explanation.
Amazing
the title says it all, I have found few stories that take the time to make the characters real like this. I would compare it to Summer Camp, My inheritance, Pete, James. You have created a wonderful story line that if you continue at this pace and rate will be a favorite for years to come. There are published authors out there that show the talent and promise that I seen in your writing. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Once more amzazed and thankful
I waited, and I was not disappointed. I love to read anything that has quality about it; and you have qulaity in your work. The plots, the alluding to of information. I love it. I am addicted your characters are amazing and they keep evolving and becoming "real." Please keep it coming.
Keep 'em coming!
These books 1 and 2 are the best writing I have read in a long , long time. I can't wait for the next one.
Thank you for such a wonderful piece
You are an excellent writer. Your characters are excellently developed and believable. I enjoyed the story, learned ways to improve my own writing and learned a lot of other things, too. This took a lot of time to write and I just wanted to say thank you.
John
Absolutely Amazing
In reading chapter 1 I considered this quite possibly the best erotic story I've ever read. I'm not even through all of chapter 2 and I'm wondering if this will be the best story of any genre I've ever read. I am in awe of how your writing has taken over every free moment for thought I have during the day.
As a former editor, though, I go absolutely bonkers at the out of place or extraneous words in the occasional sentence. I'm assuming you're not using someone else to even proofread your work before submitting it. You should change that. Even the greatest authors in history needed an extra set of eyes now and then.
Finally, a simple plea. Don't ever stop writing. You now have a duty to fulfill your potential.
Favourite's
A good writer is hard to find. When you find one you read their work over and over again. The reason you do this is because the stories that they create are so fascinating that you reveal something new each time. Everyone has read a story that is interesting. When you re-read a story because its so compelling you have found a good story. I devour books and have now read this particular story five times. I am impatiently waiting for the continuation.
Like the psychology!
Shades of Vacchs? Keep writing but fire the copy editor.
Regret's
As I sit here enjoying the afterglow of reading 'A Master's Ring:Book 02' I find myself already regretting the fact that there is no Book 04.
Soon I shall start to emerse myself into Book 03 but in my heart I know as enjoyable as it is , an ending will soon find me.
Elso whomever you are.. well done..
over the top
the killing of the two men was over the top.I have been there and done that.Itsa lot easier than you think.make it quick have a backup to make sure there are no witnesses then leave quickly.other than that this is a great story.keep up the good work.
Five Stars
Very Good
Great Piece of Art?
It was good. I hope the others will be great. Is this one great or not, you decide. It was good but not great.
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