Written like a guy. All touch for him. Nothing to please the woman. You seem to miss the romance angle, my friend. Try looking at the story through the eye of the woman and try it again. Very good first try, though.
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Nice first try..keep rewriting and polishing...
Written like a guy. All touch for him. Nothing to please the woman. You seem to miss the romance angle, my friend. Try looking at the story through the eye of the woman and try it again. Very good first try, though.
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