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thoughts...
"but the quality of thought
makes for a more fulfilling ride."
YOU SAID IT BABY! THAT'S NO JOKE!!
another great one...ARTY!
kisses,
T
mention
your poem has been mentioned in today's reviews
**5**
WOW!!! Life like wood that floats!! very ZEN I like it!!! Will you write ZMP about maybe a stone that sinks?? Maybe dont move but live does??? ZMAYou can make it good like this poem whitch I like a lot!!!
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Art, this has a nice drifting feel, and sometimes its OK to stick the Grand Statements in, but lets take these two lines
But for a few that make it to the sea...
they now drift on the River of Eternity.
merely reverse the order
they now drift on the River of Eternity.
But for a few that make it to the sea...
says the same thing, without overwhelming, when you start overwhelming, you start talking down to the audience
great concept
and sometimes life is just like that piece of driftwood. and sometimes it doesn't matter what it has been through. it always comes out the smooth one. nice write art.........Don
I drifted right along...
with this "zen~fully" tranquil piece to its River of Eternity's end. You take the simplest things on earth and transform them into an exquisite poem filled with life and beauty and grace! I so enjoy getting the double pleasure of editing and then seeing them here again on the boards, Art. Soooo... when do I get to see your next ZMP masterpiece, hmmm?
Eager to sneak a peek Vixxx
excellent
excellent poem as usual my love
hugs& kisses from your little dove
love
nin-
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A flowing flood of chaotic serenity... living whispers of lifes journey on the rivers bed of moss covered exhistance......drifting into the next realm of who we are..
lol... du~
**5**
A poignantly serene vision of the vista of life pulling the reader's awareness level up to yours. Well done.
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