All Comments on 'Ivy's Inner Slut'

Not much into casinos, but sure would like to receive that treatment from a group of BBCs. Xoxoxoxo Annette

This is more of an article about a story, instead of a story itself.

Try using dialogue to show us what is happening, and allow the reader to put themselves in the place of the characters.

What you're doing here is a purely narrative, third person description of a scene. It's had to get in to when written this way.

They took advantage of her drunkeness and the husband allowed it.

Sounds like everyone got what they wanted. I love women that are size queens, that makes them hotter than hell. Plus that makes it easier to get them to become sluts for black men with huge cocks. The absolute hottest thing I can think of is a married white woman who has a hard time saying no to a black guy that want to fuck her. Watching her will power drain away until when he unzips and pulls out a fat blackdick she can’t stop looking at it. After having taken a vow to forsake all others the look on her face as her head goes down into his lap and she submits is unforgettable. Nothing makes them orgasm harder and faster then surrendering to be stretched and filled by a blackcock. The knowledge that she’ll never be able to holdout If they press her. 1954Hall