excellent literary Art, a deep and open poem, like a ... hole lot of your witty write instilled, pearl of a poem, Alex
It alot. Loved the picture
and the flow of your words,
A fantastic first attempt
at illustrated poetry.
An illustrated triolet. Both words and picture, perfect.
The triolet is simply worded but very effective--I particularly like the consent/innocence combination--and the photo is wonderful. Well done!
The poem alone would not have been as appealing for me. But paired with the illustration, it works quite nicely.
this was better than best, Alex. Your combination of basic black shadow imagery backgrounding the simplistic; yet eloquent style of the triolet set the mood for a beautiful flow of verse. This was just lovely!
Deep, powerful and heartfelt. The triolet only made the lines stronger. The dark background helped convey the meaning.
with a very appropriate picture that makes it even stronger
Unexpectedly powerful for a triolet thanks to the background imagery.
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