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You have no shame sir
You put out one fine story after the other putting the rest of us poor authors to shame. The least you could do for us is kick the dirt like John Wayne and occasionally mutter "Shucks, tweren't nothing' in a modest tone. Ronnie W.
Pathetic
How does one collaborate a statement? Corroborate, perhaps.
And if he had sentences of 3, 7, and 3, to be served concurrently, then the most time he would have served would have been 7.
By the way, 3+7+3 = 13; not 14.
I didn't get past the first page of this drivel.
I am very sorry but
truthfully I found this submission boring. But you get a 25 for effort. Please, don't be mad. I really am not trying to be mean.
Pathetic? Drivel? No Way!
Yes there are numerous errors in the writing. But the story is so well told and the characters so vivid that I hardly noticed the flaws. Those flaws are fairly easy to correct. No amount of editing will help a mediocre or poorly told story. I'll always prefer a well told story with flaws to a lousy, crudely told story with perfect grammar and spelling.
a sweet tale
nicely told sweet tale.
Author replies to 'Pathetic'
Thanks for pointing out errors of my ways. I shall move to have those errors corrected. But it puzzles why some people have to be nasty in their feedback. What was your kind thought for today? I would be obliged if you don't read any of my contributions in future. I rather like writing pathetic, dopey, boring stories as they seem to attract a readership. Only an hour ago I received a complimentary email for having written yet another tale being 'not too heavy in sex.' I still give you a 75 'Pathetic' for highlighting glaring errors. EgmontGrigor
Crusty and Humorous and Talented
I admire emerging rough growing talent - especially one who doesn't have to or want to resort to everything else found here in lieu of effort and talent.
So, have some more fun and continue to entertain us with your seemingly limitless imagination, simi-reality and respect. Evidence that others may realize that senseless fuck and suck doesn't take much abilty but to truly entertain requires time, discipline and imagination plus respect for self and the audience [ a hero or two doesn't hurt either ].
Thanks again Crusty One - with high Regard
Good Aussie Story
Keep it up - I want to read more! As an ex jackeroo I would like to hear more of how the station will come along!
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