by Nicole99
This type of storyline is not erotic. If it turns you on you should seek help.
There is a section on this site called "Non-consent and Reluctance" where rape stories belong. Use it next time, if you have some stupid overwhelming urge for there to be a next time, so that people who are looking to read something enjoyable don't have to deal with this type of garbage.
Excellent. Whether you stole this story or not, it's hot. For that person that says it's sick; YO IT'S JUST A FUCKING FANTASY SO FUCKING RELAX! Okay, going to wack off now.
Good start, but you should have had her Dad come home and fuck both her holes...Then you could have her turn into a fucking ass slut and take on the entire football team, treating her to an all anal fuckfest. At least she won't get pregnant that way!
I liked this story when i red it on the "other" websited it was posted on, and i still like it. i guess for some people if they read a story in 2 different places they automatically assume it's stolen. somehow the idea of an author posting a story under a different name gets forgotten by them. don't let it discourage you nicole99 just keep letting your ideas flow into words and we'll keep reading them. okay gotta go read the other 2 sotries you've posted now. 1st day in nudist was great also. kudos to you
rb21
problem is thinking what books can a confirmed reader be reading that don't at least refer to sex? this girl is this big all the time reader that knows nothing. Just couldn't buy in from there.
This is a hot incest story with some elements of Non-Consentual sex. I didn't feel that her innocence was unbelievable. In fact, I know some folks who are just like her. There are some parents who shelter their kids from almost everything.
Don't worry about what the other comments said. Just keep writing, and posting! I look forward to more from you.
Peace!
srw
i liked this story because i'm a fan of incest. and to the few ppl that attacked her,next time atleast have the balls to log in. no one held a gun to your head and forced you to read this story
This peice raises many question in my mind. One is that the main character is totally devoid of any sort of natural instinct. Though she is innocent of matters sexual it is highly fantastic to have her not fight back, ie a dog will bark, bite, claw when in pain. Humans do this as well throgh screams and fighting. the brother is a very one dimenional char. he is just an angry penis it does seem that he has no any sort of defining or interesting qualities about him.
I must say that the heroine blaming herself for her rape experiance is very powerful. This is a tragic but accurate part of your story.
When I started reading this story, I found hard to believe that an 18 year old bookworm would know nothing about sex, not even about her own. But after a while I realized that my last girlfriend was just like that. It's hard to believe, I know, but there are people just like that.
that wuz a good story....very good...it woulda been hott if she gott pregnant or mayb if u write a part 2 she turns into a total slut....that would be nice...hopefully a part 2 tho
Will this dumb little bitch even know if she gets pregnant?
Non consent, bring a friend in, fucking loser the main character was. For me, wrecked the whole scene. Could have been so good...
What the F++K ...Only a thirtenn year old boy would consider this an Erotic story ...With No Concern for family or self, Out Of The Blue an Older Brother Gang Rapes His Sister and Laughs it off with his "friend" PLUUUUUUUUUUU-Ezzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Grow up write a real story.....wheeny boy
If people get turned on by this, imagine what would happen if their desires got the better of them in real life...
Sick story, rape is not fun.
It would have been better if only mutual exploration was the issue.
could have left the friend out and had her and her brother explore each other explore thier bodies and finally make love
Guess what?
I found out that the low score was TOO HIGH
not bad, complaint i have is that the girl said she guesses she was 'asking for it' because she was in the closet looking. nice irony (re the book reading) at the end. whole thing would have been better for me if she just didn't say that about 'asking for it'.
I loved it! I'd sure like to see another chapter, where she turns into a total cockslut and just can't get enough!!
man that was sick, they raped her, i hated it, ever bit disgusted me. well i guess as long you you keep this kind of fantisizing in the books and what not then its ok, but i still didnt like it.
Just what i was looking for. Thank you very much and keep up the good work!
This is fucking sick, raping his sister? Oh yeah, that's a real turn on. Then his friend coming over? Oh wow, that just turns me on! Obviously he got her pregnant ; & what is she gunna tell her parents? Oh, Nick & his friend just raped me and got me pregnant that's all!
You have no originality at all, you sick fuck!
what an asshole rape is never acceptable it is never to be encouraged or condoned you need some jail time so you can find out what it's like to be raped never write any more stories
I personally loved this story every bit of it! and i understand how people feel about rape in the other comments but STILL theres many out there who have rape fetishes, incest fetishes, group fetishes, so many people and i realy liked this story it brought alot of jesus into our live..XD ok lol that was stupid NOW what i didnt like was he fact it didnt have as much detail i was looking for even though the first half WAS AWESOME but i mean from personal experience it turns more people on when the mother or father catches them..usualy mother unless your a female and are hungry for daddy cock XD .. >< nasty..anyway Keep up the good work!!!
The narrator is an idiot, her brother is a vindictive shit and his friend is a fellow rapist.
the ending was great because it was sadly very realistic. a huge proportion of rapes and sexual assaults go unreported, and its because of reasoning EXACTLY like the last lines of this story. it may challenge that comfortable place you go to when you whack it, and for that reason makes a less than stellar spank piece, but hopefully it opened some eyes.
Your story wasn't so much hot as crepey. In the end it was just a simple story of rape, how much effort did you put into this?
Wow.. Extremely turned me on. Excellent writing method and those leaving the negative comments clearly were reading in the wrong section. Hope to see your next work sometime soon
you described a brother's rotten act of betrayal, and made it worse bringing another penis into the story.
even incest as a subject merits a bit of reality, and l8 years of brother-sister existence did not merit the tacky scene you described.
yes there could have been incest, but not cruelty
you did both, and shame on you
brothers rapes you.then lets friend rape you,but in the end sounds like you enjoy it.you never mentionif you had a orgasm.
While the initial concept of the story was good, it fell apart towards the end. Her brother decided against vaginal intercourse initially to prevent pregnancy, but when the friend was introduced they both had vaginal intercourse with her. It doesnt make any sense. Overall the part of adding in a friend ruined the story and would have been much better had the brother and sister simply developed a relationship, adding in the friend later, to give it more substance.
She didn't know about her vagina until she was 18 and never thought about boys??? NEVER.. That ruined the story right off the bat. She must not have gone to school, never talked to another girl or ever had a menstrual period. The author could have made her into a very innocent girl without bringing in the totally unbelievable.
I want to make it clear i dont condone rape in anyway but i can separate fact from fiction and on that i can enjoy a (fictional) story about rape but this just left me slightly disturbed, the way the story ended creeped me out the way she wasn't angry or upset and thought the whole thing was her fault and just went back 2 her books, its like saying "oh i just shot myself, maybe i shouldn't play with guns"
Fact, fantasy. Either way, weak. No description, no particular emotional involvement, and a downright detached and distant conclusion.
well 3 stars coz i dont like to see girl being raped... but there's no smoke without fire...like to see girl being raped... but there's no smoke without fire...
This should be in the non-consent section. This was rape, pure and simple.
One minute she's worried about getting preggo, the next she's indifferent. I must confess the ending was a little unsatisfying.
and a very good one. The commenter who wrote "girl learns about cocks" is right. The sister should be very happy, she's learned about boys and their big pricks right away and real well. I sympathize with Nick. His sister was curious about his big brotherly cock and he made his sis as familiar with it as could be--by sticking it up her cute little cunt. When Nick unloaded his brotherly balls up his sister's sweet little twat she learned an awful lot about boys and their young pricks.
This is A rape story--plain and simple. IT is well written, so I hope you have something to offer about CONSENTING ADULTS.
How can you call this a erotic story! It's called RAPE! Hope two blokes rape your mum, daughter, sister, wife. Would you call that an erotic story.
While I personally have nothing against STORIES about rape and incest this story was simply unemotional, undescriptive, and boring.
I splattered my screen with baby batter. Could be better but I liked it. Love rape stories. Would never do it. But still like to read about it.
That sucked ass! Zero erotic about rape, and damn put that crap in the section where it belongs. Too bad she didnt come back and cut his dick off while he slept, that would have been the only redeeming quality. Now I have to find something good to read before I go to sleep:(
Good story not bad for a virgin sister who is a perv perfect punshment for being a spying lil tease. Bet she fucks all his friends next. Keep writing
I was also curious about a man's penis, and peeked in at my brother in the shower, watching him jack off too. I remember my disbelief at the size and thickness of his huge erection, wondering how any woman could take that up her pussy during sex without it hurting. One day when he was working alone in our backyard shed, I put on something sexy and went inside the shed to see if I could arouse him enough to get him hard again and let me see his big penis up close. It didn't take long. I could see his erection bulging in his shorts as I sat facing him on a stool, bare legs crossed. I felt the shape of it through his shorts fabric, including its big head. When he said, "go ahead", I pulled his shorts down and watched his big thick throbbing penis bob and bounce to life. He stepped forward and pressed his huge warm hard-on on my thighs. The feel of his big warm manly cock on my thighs made me so aroused and horny. I wanted him to fuck me with his big dick, but was afraid he'd hurt my pussy with a penis that large, and would loose it and ejaculate his huge sperm load inside me. So, I took off my panties and gave him a nice head and hand job. When he was ready to cum, he pushed my hand away and jacked himself off, spewing a humongous spurts of hot manly semen onto my thighs and a little on my pussy hair! We would have more play sessions after this.
Where did you get the idea that the anal rape of a virgin sister was a good idea? It's sick and twisted and I think you have a serious mental problem. Maybe someday you go to prison, get your ass reemed, then tell us what a good story this was.
im sorry never discovered it until they were 18 did they just not pee for 18 years