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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/10/05

Movingly sober

Your poetry is frighteningly consistent in its quality and this somber poem is no exception.

b'brig

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by Anonymous05/10/05

Well its effective

Its pretty harsh. I guess I found it confronting.

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by WickedEve05/10/05

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The way you wove the wedding vows throughout the poem is quite effective.

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by Anonymous05/10/05

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~ mentioned in the review thread May 10th.

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by Jennifer C05/11/05

I

Liked how you slipped in
the wedding vows that really
worked for me.
thanks
~ J

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by Anonymous05/11/05

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All too real...great work.

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