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Very nice
Romantic and erotic.
Liked it.
Thanks.
~ J
On my way ;)
An erotic piece of work, Elfie. Keep it up, I'll fall in love with you yet. ;) :D ~Minx
I'm Coming
Moonie, just say "when" and I'm there! Wonderful play with words here. Well done. ~Ronin.
Loved It!!!
I really did love it. Sorry about the double post....I meant to give you a 100 but hit submit before clicking on the rate.
~Ronin.
Ahhh...you like me. You really like me!!!
Great images here and a wonderful sensation to boot. I thought the flow was just a little choppy in the middle, but the crips picture painted more than makes up for that. I don't know about anyone else, but I'll certainly be at your door in a moments notice, waiting to take full advantage of those glisenting stars your lying naked under. ;)
Lovely!
Beautifully done!!!
Loved the poem, the visuals..
~Honey
Impressed again
You definitely have a way with words.
very effective and emotional!!
I would only change "hides desire" to "desire hides" to improve readability.
I agree...
with sack, because I feel it will go better with "passion sleeps"...
"desire hides
and passion sleeps"
but it is a minor quibble at best. I like this just fine the way it is.
Hot!
Again you amaze me. Your poem speaks clearly of passion and emotion. Nicely done, Elf!
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